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I talked to my cousin today
Mostly about heroin
And the miles between us
I still have yet to meet his daughter
I know she will see us someday
Like brothers
Living poetry and singing lyrics
As if we were free
As if we were happy
As if we could love as open and often as these bottles we shared
And I cried today
Like a bullet leaving a gun
Waiting to land
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Candlewitch
Thu, 2022-08-11 04:58
hello,
I resonated with these lines:
And I cried today
Like a bullet leaving a gun
Waiting to land
*always, Cat
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MarkyMark
Thu, 2022-08-11 12:29
I am glad you resonated with
I am glad you resonated with them also! Thank you :)
author commentRay Whitaker
Fri, 2022-08-12 15:59
Welcome to Neopoet!
i'm enjoying your poem, and the use of white space to spotlight meaning.
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lovedly
Fri, 2022-08-12 16:07
conversation after heroin
incredible
maybe drugged poetry