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Colors

Red, orange, pink and blue,
these colors make me think of you.

The sun rests and the moon wakes,
the clouds cover the dying rays.

The color will die, and darkness will ensue,
but I'll always keep the thought of you.

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Comments

We could do a few tweaks to make it super tight but it’s fairly smooth as is.

Well done,
Tim

it is nice to meet you! all of your colors are in the brighter spectrum. you are probably an upbeat person and poet. a good read. thank you for sharing.

*hugs, Cat

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Hello, DreamBug,
I, too, like the brevity of this. It seems the message is clear, and very tender.
Thank you!
Lavender

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