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Choices

Submitted by Rosewood Apothecary on Tue, 2022-12-06 17:49

Some are excellent for certain
Others not so much
If I’m the man behind the curtain
The choice is mine to touch

At times I choose entirely wrong
At least that’s how it feels
I carry these mistakes so long
My spirit starts to reel

Reflecting on the sore missteps
I find the lessons dear
I’ll try to choose a better path
To walk along this coming year

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Anyone else beat themselves up over stuff? It’s my modus operandi
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Geezer

Tue, 2022-12-06 18:24

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I do it frequently. Not so much as I used to, but then I don't have that much time to get into trouble.
I think that as we get older, we tend to slow down and think things through before acting. [I do still think of mistakes I've made in the past]; but I wouldn't be here where I am if I had done things differently. [Butterfly wings and all that stuff]. This is a gentle reminder to watch out for making rash decisions! I like it! I don't see anything I would change. Good work! ~ Geez.
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Jackweb

Tue, 2022-12-06 23:07

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When we don't learn from our mistakes, we inflict unnecessary stress on our selves and others, and we risk loosing people's confidence and trust in us. Nice one!
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Lavender

Wed, 2022-12-07 09:05

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Hi, Tim,
You hit the mark with this. I used to beat myself up all the time, but have mellowed with age, I think. Life isn't supposed to be perfect, and I wasted a lot of precious time trying. Your poem is a great affirmation!
Thank you!
L

RoseBlack

Wed, 2022-12-07 17:13

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I know I still make mistakes but try my best to learn from each lesson. I think slowly I have gotten the hang of it but still falter from time to time. I tend to be my harshest critic and reflect on decisions past. Great write! Wouldn't change a thing.

~RoseBlack~

Candlewitch

Thu, 2022-12-08 10:19

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it sounds to me like a new year's resolution, I like it. I think you have learned a lot from any missteps you have made in the past. that reminds me...it is almost that time of year again. (great structure to your poem). you have a great one.

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Words.unwritten

Thu, 2022-12-08 08:37

Lovely ... sounds like a promise ...determination ... I love this

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