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Challenge In My Element

Submitted by Alex Tanner on Mon, 2023-01-16 14:17

Last night I heard the thunder roll.
Did you?
Saw bolts from Zeus scorch the skies.
Did you?
Stepped outside, quite naked,
Felt Calandra's icy tears
Shock my body, cleanse my soul,
Make me gasp, make me whole.
Did you?

Review Request (Intensity): 
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
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Editing - polished draft
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January 2023 Challenge In My Element
Content level: 
Not Explicit Content

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Rosewood Apothecary

Mon, 2023-01-16 17:39

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Stellar imagery.

Tim

Alex Tanner

Wed, 2023-01-18 05:17

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Thanks Tim, always appreciated. .Alex

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Lavender

Mon, 2023-01-16 18:37

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Hello, Alex,
Not knowing about Calandra, I went Googling. Very clever poem!
L

Alex Tanner

Wed, 2023-01-18 05:19

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I often wonder how many have heard of her. I only recently found out about her. Alex

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RoseBlack

Mon, 2023-01-16 19:19

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I like how you incorporated the mythological reference to the elements. Well done.

~RoseBlack~

Alex Tanner

Wed, 2023-01-18 05:27

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Hello Rose This was not how I originally planned it. Was just supposed to be a reference to the fury and cleansing of nature. Then this idea came to me. I think I may try writing one about the thinking process. Alex

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Candlewitch

Tue, 2023-01-17 07:07

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wonderfully creative... you stole my breath away...

*hugs, Cat

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Alex Tanner

Wed, 2023-01-18 05:41

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Dear Cat.. Always so kind. Alex

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