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Challenge - Emulate your favorite poet! - Absence of Light (If a young Edgar Allan Poe had written a sonnet)

This hour they call the dead of the night,
But night is not dark when you are so near.
Time and again time, I ponder and think,
It's only your voice I so long to hear.

I love the fair night, for it brings me dreams,
Where I dream of you, so loving and sweet.
You are my bright light, no other as missed,
It’s you that I want in my dreams to meet.

My dreams do tend to be scary and dark
With black dogs that growl, howl and bark,
But even my nightmares give me no fright.

This one fact is known and perfectly clear,
The only thing that I so dread and fear
Is the darkest thing... The absence of light.

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in s#2 line1 I love the fair night, cause it brings me dreams, (I would change: because for cause) in my opinion It sounds classier.
my favorite lines are:

My dreams do tend to be scary and dark
With black dogs that growl, howl and bark,
But even my nightmares give me no fright.

I have heard the black dog howl on occasion! it isn't pleasant!

*hugs, Cat

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Thank you for the kind words.

I completely agree with you and also prefer 'because', but I was trying to keep the number of syllables within the rules for my first sonnet. Hopefully I'll do better next time.

Cheers,
Jack

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could you have the right amount if you dropped the word (fair)

I love the fair night, cause it brings me dreams, change it to:

I love the night, because it brings me dreams,

*hugs, Cat

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I like your suggestion :-) Thank you.

P.S.:
Went to edit the verse and thought of another solution which allows for the same rhythm. What do you think?

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very much!

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Edgar Allan Poe was a great American writer and poet. He is best known for his evocative poems that captured the imagination and the interest of the resders. I read his poetry when I was in primary 5, 1995. One of his poems I still recite off hand entitled; "A dream Within A dream".

Thank you for this post.

"Poetic license
gives
the poets
the free will to
embroider a good tale
and deviate from the established rules of language"~Jackweb

Edgar Allan Poe was a great American writer and poet. He is best known for his evocative poems that captured the imagination and the interest of the readers. I read his poetry when I was in primary 5, 1995. One of his poems I still recite off hand entitled; "A dream Within A dream".

Thank you for this post.

"Poetic license
gives
the poets
the free will to
embroider a good tale
and deviate from the established rules of language"~Jackweb

The stirring of imagination in Poe's writing is what still draws me back to him. Unfortunately, his work is not covered before University level in Serbia (and only if you study English language and literature).

Cheers,
Jack

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A good job at trying emulate Poe, it is not an easy task to do so. My favorite lines were:

I love the fair night, cause it brings me dreams,
Where I dream of you, so loving and sweet.
You are my bright light, no other as missed,
It’s you that I want in my dreams to meet.

You can hear the longing and the hint at a tragic and lost love which Poe was famous for conveying in most of his poems. Good job.

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To be honest, this poem came to being without Poe in mind. Only after I read it aloud it reminded me of the atmosphere I found in his work.
Thank you for the encouragement.

Cheers,
Jack

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very often; I do emulate other poets style when I have read or heard a similar theme. I agree with everything said so far; you have acquitted yourself very well in writing a sonnet as might have been written by Shakespear. Very nice, ~ Geezer.
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