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Challenge- Dear John Letter

Submitted by Clentin on Wed, 2023-05-24 05:58

Roll over my love
Look deeply into my eyes
Kiss me one last time

Review Request (Intensity): 
I appreciate moderate constructive criticism
Editing stage: 
Editing - rough draft
Contest: 
May 2023 Challenge Dear John Letter
Content level: 
Not Explicit Content

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Geezer

Wed, 2023-05-24 08:51

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an idea for a modern, English senryu! Nothing more to be said. Good stuff! ~ Geezer.
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RoseBlack

Sat, 2023-05-27 10:15

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The simplest, most touching Dear John letter I have seen. Great job!

~RoseBlack~

Clentin

Sat, 2023-05-27 13:05

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Thank you, I appreciate your reading my poems and you comments. Any help is great.

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