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Chaff or Bread
Holier are we, than whom?
Holier than those flocking
towards another gathering,
together, corporately giving worth.
And doing so whilst on their knees.
And yet they too,
bob and weave through life,
just as everyone else does.
But we, who are the many,
who have often been
“kicked to the kerb.”
Who since our unholy birth
have whistled with the wind,
We are in fact, the Holy Ones.
We who are, in all truth,
the brethren set aside
to live as separate ones.
Pryderi Duntz
5th December 2022
Devonshire.
source JW.org
The Hebrew word translated "holy"
comes from a term meaning "separate."
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Geezer
Mon, 2022-12-05 09:24
I am not sure...
of how you mean the chaff, is it substituting the leavings
of seeds,stalks and hulls for flour? Or is it a double-meaning;
as to distract from the main and being the substitution for a target?
As to the spelling of [kerb], I'm guessing it is purely a colloquial spelling,
because I did find it on Google; but the most prominent spelling is curb.
A view espoused by many, as a theme, it kind of works. Maybe for someone
a little more religious than I, it may be a matter of some importance. ~ Geezer.
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Pryderi Duntz.
Mon, 2022-12-05 17:06
Chaff or Bread
Geezer, thanks for reading. Chaff is the query you raise. No, it’s not intended as a decoy as in the military sense. It is, in this context the product of threshing wheat. Of course this waste is indigestible by humans so infers a choice. The title sets up an implied choice. The other point is the use of the word ‘kerb.’ I avoid Google where possible, but The Cambridge Dictionary offers:-
kerb noun [ C ] us / kɜrb / Br for curb (Definition of kerb from the Cambridge Academic Content Dictionary © Cambridge University Press) Examples of kerb kerb Pavements, kerbs, signs, road markings, diverse street furniture, pedestrians and moving traffic were represented. From the Cambridge English Corpus.
Ironically the phrase is not used in general parlance in UK.
The message is intended to be one of misunderstanding and ignorance. And clearly can be misinterpreted as ecclesiastical. It is intended as a critique of any holier then thou judgementally inclined sorts.
Thanks again.
It needs a rethink into avoid such misinterpretation.
author commentGeezer
Tue, 2022-12-06 08:23
Thank you...
for your explanation, it was most helpful. I do know that [kerb] was/is an alternate spelling and thought that it may be a more nationality type thing, such as the British penchant for putting a [u] in words such as flavour or colour. ~ Geezer.
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Pryderi Duntz.
Tue, 2022-12-06 13:18
Yes mostly due to Continental
Yes mostly due to Continental European type setters I believe. English is a very mixed up cobbled together creature.
author commentLavender
Mon, 2022-12-05 18:15
Chaff or Bread
Hello!
I cannot help but think of gleaning while reading this - my interpretation, I realize.
Thank you,
L
Pryderi Duntz.
Tue, 2022-12-06 13:30
Chaff. . .
Intriguing. Well that’s something that I didn’t intend. But I can sort of see.
However. I am certainly glad to hear you have possibly gathered something of worth in my efforts. (see what I done there?)
P ap D
author commentPryderi Duntz.
Tue, 2022-12-06 13:38
Chaff. . .
Intriguing. Well that’s something that I didn’t intend. But I can sort of see.
However. I am certainly glad to hear you have possibly gathered something of worth in my efforts. (see what I done there?)
P ap D
author commentTriskelion
Wed, 2023-02-01 09:10
Chaff or Bread
I examined this piece from a number of angles and conclude that it is applicable from many points of view, so becomes a whirlwind of thought-inducing paradigms. The title resets the process over each time. At least that's my take. It is intriguing, but I guess it's style is reserved for those with more mental stamina than I have. I lean toward passionate writing.
You have a unique way of writing. I hope you realize suitable appreciation for it.
Thomas
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...so like my lost dreams...the flood
Pryderi Duntz.
Sun, 2023-02-05 17:29
Feedback - respect for your time.
Thomas, apologies for delay in acknowledging your response.
Yes, agreed, this is probably about a worthy or. unworthy thread. A little bit of “Stand-Up Philosophy” nothing too deep. I think it’s speaking of juxtaposition useful or useless. It’s all about The Self Image,
Chaff or Bread? Well the link is grain. Both are products of processing grain. In fact both have a value.
I think that it’s described though who can say?
Thanks again. Pryderi Duntz.
“We turn to Poetry when ordinary language feels inadequate.”
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