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The Cat with Eight Lives

At five years old Lucky grew wise
If rumours were steadfast and true
But it’s not just the east, where whispers deceive
Your senses and alter your views

At birth he was given, a name that was bound
To catch him off-guard and reveal
To believe every word, is just as absurd
As a cat growing wings like a bird

Each morning at eight, lucky would wait
For the pigeon he’d come to resent
At the top of the tree, he’d perch to escape
So, he planned a cunning accent

Eight times he tried, but each time he climbed
He fell and was injured but healed
But lucky was wise, so he didn’t devise
Another attempt, or he’d reach his demise

This was more than a game, like a moth to a flame
He didn’t succeed but he tried
While he napped in the sun, with a saucer of milk
He was snatched by a fox and he died

A credulous cat, a crafty old fox
And a pigeon who lives to this day
Don’t push your luck, there’s a price to be paid
And there’s more to a cat than his name

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This poem offers a unique narrative about a cat with an adventurous spirit and unfortunate fate. The imagery of a “cunning accent” and “snatched by a fox” is vivid and well-crafted. The poem also offers a moral about not pushing one’s luck and the importance of taking caution. While the poem is well-written and thought-provoking, it could benefit from further development of the characters and their motivations. Additionally, the poem’s ending could be improved to provide a more satisfying resolution. Overall, this poem is an engaging and imaginative work that offers readers a moral lesson.

A satisfying ending isn't always a good way to teach people. Sometimes lessons are best learned when things go wrong. So this AI is brilliant but also kind of flawed in that it doesn't understand emotion and the intricacies of life. But having said that, still really enjoying this new approach to feedback.

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on AI exactly! However, I think that if it learns to intersperse the grammar and knowledge with the continued friendly tone,
it will give a great critique. I suspect that it would learn rather rapidly, if given the proper instructions. Scary, huh?
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