Join the Neopoet online poetry workshop and community to improve as a writer, meet fellow poets, and showcase your work. Sign up, submit your poetry, and get started.

CABIN FEVER

Susan and I have been snowed in for 4 days................

Of course you know that I love you
but why must you breathe so loud
and every time you come in view
I feel like I'm in a large crowd

I know my rocking chair is squeaking
thus disrupting your slumber
must your lips move so while speaking ?
and you snore like you are cutting lumber

What's that about my new cologne ?
which I use when I groom
won't you just leave me alone
remove Your perfume's cloud from the room

Now we'll talk about bad breath
when did you last brush your teeth
you've already caused the canary's death
and nearly brought the dog to grief

And I don't care what you say
when I blink I make no sound
my laugh is not an ass's bray
and my eyes are not too round

By the way the stale bread sticks
you foisted off on me for lunch
reminded me of skinny bricks
don't get your panties in a bunch

The last four days alone with me
have been really swell ?
'cept you're so bored that you can't see
and wish that I would go to hell !

Too much looking out the window.......
Hey, the road has melted clear !!
throw your coat on and we'll go
drive around and eat out my dear

Style / type: 
Structured: Western
Review Request (Intensity): 
I appreciate moderate constructive criticism
Review Request (Direction): 
What did you think of my title?
How does this theme appeal to you?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?
Editing stage: 

Comments

It's beginning to leave us here. In my part of the world snow usually comes and goes quickly without giving us a chance to tire of it, but this one is still here after a full week which is rare lol. I'm pleased you enjoyed this................stan

author comment

If I weren't secure in my love of Susan( and hers for me.....I think ) I would not have dared write this. Alas my bad knee bans me from even sledding much less snow boarding and this was perfect sledding snow....................stan

author comment

Hmph! So glad that you can laugh at our misery...............JUST KIDDING lol. This was written in fun and I'm glad you took it that way ..............stan

author comment

Nobody seems to consider the damage the ship must have done to the iceberg lol. Having now damned myself, I'm glad to see you come by...........stan

author comment

Wondered how you were getting on being snowed in - you made me smile - at the same time cabin fever can be a real problem. People need to be able to get out and about so being stuck in for almost a week can push a relationship to boiling point. Good job you and Susan love each other!!

Thanks for sharing Stan

Love Mand xxxxxx

You can bet we were 2 smiling faces when we were finally able to get out lol. I have read of people stuck in a small cabin for weeks leading to murder . At least we had the net and TV to help us out. Thanks for the visit.............stan

author comment
(c) Neopoet.com. No copyright is claimed by Neopoet to original member content.