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BREAD
Another crumb, another day.
One more slice another year
as one by one time slips away
with loss of the ones I hold dear.
Until there's little left to chew
and few loaves left from times gone by.
Too soon the losses are nothing new
matters not the tears we cry.
Some loaves get toasted by fast living
others stay white from lives lived cold.
then some are cut too short by giving
better that than green from mold.
Today time ate one more sandwich
which has been beside me here for years.
Gone without even a twitch
a cause for more shedding of tears.
One day I'll see those other lives
and we'll discuss that baker up above.
as we reunite with friends and wives
and all those whom we dared to love.
Style / type:
Structured: Western
Review Request (Intensity):
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
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Contest:
Content level:
Not Explicit Content
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Comments
Geezer
Wed, 2022-01-12 09:07
Boy...
this one hits home! I like the images of old age and death taking their bites from our lives. One of your better ones in the realm of scancion. ~ Geez.
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This must be the place, 'cause there ain't no place like this place anywhere near this place
scribbler
Wed, 2022-01-12 13:37
Hi Geez
You can be assured the scansion was almost accidental lol. As to hitting home I reckon all us old guys have similar thoughts
lovedly
Wed, 2022-01-12 23:39
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scribbler
Wed, 2022-01-12 23:02
Actually I read this before posting and after edit and
Still did not see this lol. thanks for eagle eye
lovedly
Wed, 2022-01-12 23:37
deleting
u know me minor points must be brushed off lol
scribbler
Thu, 2022-01-13 09:07
But
I appreciate it when other catch my mistakes
lovedly
Thu, 2022-01-13 14:58
OKAY
Shall catch you
FREE EDIT EH
SMART GUY
STAN
scribbler
Thu, 2022-01-13 19:45
sure beats
Paying lmao
lovedly
Thu, 2022-01-13 20:02
LOL
U R A GOOD PAL
Jackweb
Thu, 2022-01-13 17:44
Scrib Sparks again!
A good poetry is a contribution to reality.
"By virtue of creativity, my literary genre is poetry".
~Jackweb
scribbler
Thu, 2022-01-13 19:45
Hello
I am pleased you dropped by for a read