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Borrowed Sun

Submitted by lovedly on Fri, 2020-03-27 04:11

HOPE Kindly

the light has not gone
again the sun today
has shone
so will it
morn after morn
till a newer mankind
continues to be born

A brave mask
must all Humans
adorn

See the sun
has smiled after long
and
again it has come
to shine
create another fresher
humans man-mine

Style / type: 
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity): 
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing stage: 
Editing - rough draft

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lovedly

Sat, 2020-03-28 03:54

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A dozen poems
in STREAM
UNREAD
so it seems
So not to waste your time
I am going to
lock out
going in for a
LONG ISOLATION
COWARD 19

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Roscoe Lane

Sat, 2020-03-28 04:12

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What a poignant poem, if only some people understood we all need each other. Very well put. Regards Roscoe..

Roscoe Llane,

Religion will rip your faith off, and return
for the mask of disbelief that's left.

lovedly

Sat, 2020-03-28 11:12

lovedly's picture

neopoets are very few
like you

we all know
the sun smiled at me
and you followed too

Now I shall also keep track of you
Let our sun
be a common
SON
THANKS RGDS

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Geezer

Sat, 2020-03-28 15:14

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It seems that I can't leave you alone for a minute. Remember, I always read you, just don't alays have the time to critique or comment
~ Geezer.
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lovedly

Sun, 2020-03-29 02:27

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but have to courage to comment
ur too good for me
Gee

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Geezer

Sun, 2020-03-29 17:40

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You are just a different kind of poet. We are all individuals that express differently
~ Geezer.
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There is value to commenting and critique, tell us how you feel about our work.
This must be the place, 'cause there ain't no place like this place anywhere near this place.

lovedly

Mon, 2020-03-30 02:20

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yes one of a KIND

You are just a

different UNIQUE

kind of poet

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