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Blue Prints

Submitted by lovedly on Thu, 2020-06-11 00:06

Such a lovely plan
for next life
in well
can't believe it
heaven

do send me a blue print
if you can

I have studied so many lives
O poet man

I dare not be different with thee

all wives are at night time
only
lovely

Rest you have told everyone

all wives are similar
exception is
none

not one

What a bloody foolish
husband
with him life is no fun
lol

trying to find another one
anyone would be welcome

Style / type: 
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity): 
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
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Editing - rough draft
Content level: 
Not Explicit Content

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Geezer

Thu, 2020-06-11 08:15

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see where you are coming from this time lovedly. well can't believe it heaven? Can't believe you/they/he/she is going to heaven? A little elucidation please? ~ Geezer.
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lovedly

Thu, 2020-06-11 09:23

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composed a poem for her
''If he had a choice
he would like to be her wife
as she is now a wifey
so that
she would know
what is her real worth
except for a few moments
through a long wintry night
a plight
all men would give
up a life

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Gracy

Thu, 2020-06-11 12:40

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Anyone would not do for me, lovedly! I'm not sure what you mean, despite your explanation. Dumber and dumber...that's me.
Gracy

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Obadiah Grey

Thu, 2020-06-11 14:17

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Quite clever with subtle rhyme!

Obi.

Geezer

Thu, 2020-06-11 15:26

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You are trying to say that; He would like to be a wife so he could show her how much he appreciates her? ~ Geezer.
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Lavender

Thu, 2020-06-11 18:07

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Hi, Lovedly,
I feel the frustration of it all here, so much so that 'anyone would be welcome.' Interesting title, and it seems the poem is speaking to a poet, correct? The language sounds Old-English or Early Modern to me, which makes the 'lol' reference stand out a bit - but maybe that was intentional? Very intriguing!
Thank you!
L

lovedly

Thu, 2020-06-11 22:39

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the poet who composed it
is an INTERNATIONAL POET OF REPUTE
He has a great vision
of the human mind
and
I think with my views
he does chime
I only endeavor to rhyme
LOL---- I add because Stan does so
He is also humorous
all NEO'S know .

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