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Blind eyes

Life, I lost my words.
Tomorrow is another end.
I cannot see through.

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Free verse
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The below is a computer generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:

Overall, "Blind Eyes" is a brief yet impactful poem that captures a sense of despair and hopelessness. The speaker's loss of words and inability to see through suggest a deep sense of confusion and disconnection from the world around them. The repetition of "end" in the second line adds to the overall bleak tone, as if the speaker is resigned to a never-ending cycle of disappointment.

One possible line edit could be to add a comma after "Life" in the first line, as it reads a bit awkwardly without one. Additionally, while the brevity of the poem is effective in its own right, it might benefit from a bit more development or detail to fully flesh out the emotions being expressed. For instance, what has caused the speaker to lose their words and sight? What is the significance of "tomorrow" as another end? These could be explored further to add more depth to the poem.

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