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Black Flag

Submitted by RoseBlack on Sat, 2023-01-21 11:19

Poison words
Flowing from your tongue
My name must taste good
In every song you've sung

Pull a dagger, Bitch
Then I'll pull a sword
The time has come
You're not the adored

Hide and seek
A little too late
No one likes ugly
Time to meet fate

Run, run
As fast as you can
Don't worry, I'll catch you
I'm the bitchilante hitman

Style / type:

Free verse

Review Request (Intensity):

I appreciate moderate constructive criticism

Editing stage:

Editing - rough draft

Content level:

Not Explicit Content

Comments

Seren

Sat, 2023-01-21 14:25

Dear RoseBlack

Well I promise not to piss you off. This has venom and it's really well written. I wrote a poem called Judas Kiss it's here on the site I think. It's something like this. Well done. Your pen has a sting!!! I love it.

I can't see anything I'd change but I'm overtired I'll take another look when I come back this afternoon my time. Sun's up I've been up all night writing. It's all good I only get 3hrs sleep most nights.

Kind regards J x

P.s. I think that title is perfect.

“The world is full of magic things, patiently waiting for our senses to grow sharper.” — W.B. Yeats

RoseBlack

Sat, 2023-01-21 14:59

Thank you

For your high praise! Writing is a release for me and I think I am learning how to structure it instead of letting it all spill out. I will check out your poem for sure! Thanks again.

~RoseBlack~

author comment

Candlewitch

Sat, 2023-01-21 17:17