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Beauty in the Darkness (inspired by Candlewitch for Chrystalie)

Submitted by Rosewood Apothecary on Mon, 2022-12-12 10:29

Bower made from boughs and sage
Lies nestled on the deck
You rest upon the bower
A chain of silver skirts your neck

Wrapped in finest linen and
Encased in magic wards
Protections for your journey
From arrows and cruel tempered swords

Foregone on your funeral boat
A ship we all must take
Across the darkest sea of all
Beyond the black and mortal lake

Sail into the funeral pyre
Pass then into dark
Reflections of your life appear
Beautiful and brightly stark

So now you drift eternal
In the straights of memory
A beauty in the darkness
Is what you’ll always be for me

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Structured: Western
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I’m saddened by the news. I’ve never had interaction with her but I feel some grief for those of you that have, especially Cat who expressed her feelings through this beautiful poem. https://www.neopoet.com/workshop/poems/light-darkness-she-was-contender This was my inspiration
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Editing - polished draft
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Not Explicit Content

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Candlewitch

Mon, 2022-12-12 11:45

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a very beautiful poem. you have touched a place in my heart in which Chrys will always remain. thank you, beautiful boy!

*love Cat

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lovedly

Mon, 2022-12-12 12:02

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only you could write
Let the departed one
REST IN PEACE
eternally........

Geezer

Mon, 2022-12-12 13:16

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I see you have the emotions of those who knew her and are someone who feels emotion rather strongly. What to do they call us, empaths? I think that most poets are at least partly empathic, but you sir, are more than others. One little quibble. I think
you should delete the word [from] From arrows and tempered swords. You don't need that extra one. Otherwise, a really good
piece. ~ Geez.
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Rosewood Apothecary

Mon, 2022-12-12 13:47

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But yeah I see sawed on that one too man trust me. I’ll figure out something better.

Thanks for reading,
Tim

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Jackweb

Tue, 2022-12-13 12:43

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A very touching piece indeed! A refined and beautiful whisper, like lush orchard, jasmine flowers, and fragrant winds. In your last stanza, you made a very beautiful ending. Excellently penned!
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