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Beautiful Eyes

Submitted by lovedly on Sun, 2023-01-29 01:45

There's beauty
in each one's eyes
so we see differently

to ensure
we don't dwell

in an indifferent
mundane world

we all are beautiful
humans
animals
birds
and
bees

Style / type: 
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity): 
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Last few words: 
All eyes are beautiful
Editing stage: 
Editing - rough draft
Content level: 
Not Explicit Content

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Triskelion

Sun, 2023-01-29 12:48

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I wish that we could be a bee
A fuzzy wuzzy bumblebee
A buzzing bumbling bee we be
A-buzzing 'round a basswood tree

He-hee!

Thomas

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...so like my lost dreams...the flood

lovedly

Sun, 2023-01-29 12:55

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u r humorous

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Triskelion

Sun, 2023-01-29 14:28

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We could see a lot more beauty...may be why bees are attracted by flowers. Now write a poem about flowers and bees.
Please.

Thomas

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...so like my lost dreams...the flood

lovedly

Mon, 2023-01-30 12:25

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You can wear double glasses or carry Binoculars you will see better AHA

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Triskelion

Sat, 2023-02-11 14:41

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your poetry, it's like looking through a kaleidoscope.
May be like bees see....oui?

Thomas

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...so like my lost dreams...the flood

lovedly

Sat, 2023-02-11 23:56

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thanks a tonnnneeeeeeeee

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scribbler

Sun, 2023-01-29 15:16

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Try it using each one's eyes instead of eye. Even an insect with compound vision has 2 eyes lol

lovedly

Mon, 2023-01-30 00:37

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for he edit I had it in mind ...but perhaps ignored the rhyme
Thanks ... this is what Neo is for
rgds

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Lavender

Sun, 2023-01-29 15:44

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Hello, Lovedly,
I agree with Stan - plural eyes in the second line, especially to go along with your title. So glad to look at the world through your inspiring poem and your "Beautiful Eyes."
Thank you!
Lav

Seren

Mon, 2023-01-30 01:51

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I agree with all the above suggestions.

I think you could've expanded this made your poems world bigger.

I see you've changed that second line.

Well done.

Love and hugs Sis xxx

“The world is full of magic things, patiently waiting for our senses to grow sharper.” — W.B. Yeats

lovedly

Mon, 2023-01-30 03:48

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I am a Neo follower
Waiting a poem from you

aeons past by

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Seren

Mon, 2023-01-30 05:03

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Read your messages. I sent you one hrs ago.

Jayne

“The world is full of magic things, patiently waiting for our senses to grow sharper.” — W.B. Yeats

lovedly

Mon, 2023-01-30 05:24

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Let the world know ...an anony once lived
I must also know someone
another poem composed
before i ebbed...
Aussie sis

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