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Be Proud To Be Different

Submitted by alidzain on Sun, 2016-10-30 12:27

Be brave to step forward,
embrace who you are.
when others see you awkward,
show them you're a star.

Let them be a follower,
while you take the lead.
Don't you cower and falter
as the envious hearts bleed.

Remember,
the peacocks with their colourful
feathers
can never fly far like an eagle.

Style / type:

Free verse

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Esker

Sun, 2016-10-30 17:36

Lee Quan Yew

organizer of Tamil and chinese...other..
RIP!

was HE a peacock or Eagle?

communist but he drew the labour parties
together to broker a deal
He was very colorful

Ports fly all colors
Sydney....
New York
Montreal
Vancouver

a time of harsh change
in the world
we must cull the danger
Every anti voice must
be examined and its actions
for Anti ness
anti american..anti national
anti woman
this new threat ISIS is hiring
all malcontents..
even Homosexuals
They woulld never had a woman
holding a torch in their harbor
but hire the malcontents to blow
her up....
those that drive off women
on liberal sites such as
well Ours...

we must defend Liberty
for the world is plunging towards
a great void
Hatred must not be rewarded
as U see I still Love my neighbors
while others do their best to drive
them away....
if this was June of thirty eight
todays radicals would by october
be wearing a black shirt
and be Hunted by American
Liberators seven years later
..

Let us keep the correct way
!

The New World Order!

Esker

Sun, 2016-10-30 17:46

Ms Teo!

a powerful woman..
I dont know why the world
has its anti women males
Look at these males and
somehwere they are Male Male
oriented
the files on them
reveal their true nature

In more structured regimes
and primitive they are
more then admonished
they are abolished
!

Americas freedom
might be at a time
when Trump needs to
strenghthen borders
and bring back the
anti Sinners laws
before we .the neighbour
to our hood get the
backlash should america
fall from the worms let
to breed within
.
I hope not...

At least Bill Clinton liked
women...
and they liked him
but ..Hillary is sub serve to Bill
And Trump is like the wealthy
British Colonialists founding
places like Hong Kong and
working with Sinapore!

its all Fuedal again!..

BUT time to clean house
of the rot of sin!

Thank U!

alidzain

Sun, 2016-10-30 17:59

Thanks Esker

for the visit, the read and the comment.

Alid

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Esker

Sun, 2016-10-30 18:07

Alidzan

any port in a storm!
being an intellectual
and hating bullies
I know where I would stand
in such a watched over
country.....
America welcomes everyone
but she suffers.
Canada too..
but we have our Intel
people...
it is a time again for
vigilance
and its not asking much
to be rid of hate
...
Your country is vibrant
and strong
standing in its own
right.....

Thank U!

Keith Logan

Thu, 2016-11-03 06:44

Well written

sage advice but not for me. I don't have to show anyone I am different or similar or anything else. I am just me.

Keith Logan
the happy chappy
https://www.neopoet.com/community-guidelines

alidzain

Fri, 2016-11-04 15:48

Hi Keith

good for you. Thanks for the read

Alid

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