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Attack of the Panic
The room is silent
I can’t breathe
Cover my face from the light
Cover my face from the world
Tears stream down my face
The room is spinning
Darkness falls on my mind
Silence so deafening
I feel so alone
Still can’t breathe
Can’t break free of the pain
Waiting for the comfort of light
Waiting on the warmth of touch
Praying to be found
Locked in a chamber of my own secrets
Afraid because the world has shut me out
Dying because becoming a burden is too much
When I scream no one hears my anguish
They only see me smile
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Candlewitch
Sun, 2022-06-26 12:20
hello Jillian,
OMG! your poem chilled my blood (good title) although I have different issues, a panic attack is a panic attack!!! great poem as it takes the reader on a specific trip, and that trip ain't great, for sure! your language is good, the reader doesn't stumble over the words, so it is smooth as silk! so easy to read. my panic attacks if my husband holds me too closely. or the covers are too tight! I hate feeling bound and helpless. it is odd because in the case of emergency situations, I have been the first to act. (sensibly) anyway...
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I loved these lines:
Locked in a chamber of my own secrets
Afraid because the world has shut me out
Dying because becoming a burden is too much
When I scream no one hears my anguish
They only see me smile
*warm smiles to you ;) Cat
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Geezer
Sun, 2022-06-26 12:56
On an odd note...
after reading your poem, I suddenly had a vision of the Cheshire Cat! [I believe that seeing your last line "They only see me smile" and the poetess' name "Cat" in the vicinity, made this happen. Of course, I do believe that "Alice" was having a panic-attack, when she fell down the rabbit-hole; and maybe all that combined? Anyway, I wish to commend you for being able to articulate the emotions so clearly, that you made it a very interesting read. Welcome to Neopoet! If you keep writing like this, you will have a good following here in no time. ~ Geezer.
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Rosewood Apothecary
Sun, 2022-06-26 18:09
Haunting
This is an experience I’ve had many times. You convey the absolute terror and helplessness of these episodes with ease in the piece. Sorry this is something you experience, I hope that writing helps process some of the racing thoughts and emotions. You’re a good writer. Keep it up.
Ray Whitaker
Fri, 2022-07-01 14:34
Very nice piece
you have here. excellent imagery and convince of meaning.
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Candlewitch
Sun, 2022-07-03 05:10
dear Jillian,
congratulations on your winning poem of "attack of the panic" or (poem of the week) it is a fine piece!
*hugs, Cat
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Jillian Morris
Sat, 2023-03-18 21:35
Thank you
Thank you for your kind words.
author commentRosewood Apothecary
Sun, 2022-07-03 05:54
Congratulations
Nice work winning poem of the week. “Dying because becoming a burden is too much.” Simply put with pinpoint accuracy. Superb job. I look forward to reading more.
Tim
Geezer
Sun, 2022-07-03 09:00
Congratulations!...
Hope you write more stuff soon. You have rung a bell with people here. Keep writing! ~ Geezer.
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