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The art of War

A simple man,
in a simple life,
without a simple stand.

The simple flower he holds,
close to his heart,
singing.

He plays with words.

I love.

I loved.

I will love.

He falls,
down, crumbles, fight for his own way,
and while You could sit and watch him, crawl,

Would you ?

Style / type: 
Structured: Eastern
Review Request (Intensity): 
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
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What did you think of my title?
How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How does this theme appeal to you?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?
Is the internal logic consistent?
Editing stage: 
Content level: 
Not Explicit Content

Comments

that is a very good question!

*hugs, Cat

When someone reads your work
And responds, please be courteous
And reply in kind, thanks.

I enjoyed the work you put into making this a sort of pseudo-love poem. Nice! ~ Geezer.
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It seems that the days and hours that people
are available for chatroom are staggered and
not a good match for most everyone. How about
if everyone just shows up at the door, whenever
they have a few free minutes?

Thank You for your comments.

Jakub

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