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ALL ROUND OF LIFE

ALL ROUND
They came
rather were brought
They lived and played
all kinds of loving games
days all nights
rather
ALL THROUGH THEIR LIVING LIVES
then one day they slipped
into dungeons of time
SILENTLY unknown
broken knees and jaws
none complained
once gone
AND
to WHOM
resting in PEACE
Now
RIP thee
those gone
to the corner of life you belong

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Free verse
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these are my favorite lines:

ALL ROUND
They came
rather were brought
They lived and played
all kinds of loving games
days all nights
rather

I like them because they sound like the beginning of a much longer tale, a book perhaps!

love, Cat

When someone reads your work
And responds, please be courteous
And reply in kind, thanks.

Cats you are
CAT THE GREAT

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lovedly sitting by the campfire with a bunch of young'uns before him, doling out wisdom and teasing them with wonderous tales of his youth. ~ Geez.
.

It seems that the days and hours that people
are available for chatroom are staggered and
not a good match for most everyone. How about
if everyone just shows up at the door, whenever
they have a few free minutes?

Share as much of me as you can GEE
I will forever be friends of youngly
teeny weeny kids
who believe in me
my story
I am a lover of Neo
you all knoe
lol
humour smile and love of life
are my ingredients Gee
tell em openly
I'm the only one
LOVED
LY

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I like your poem. These are my favorite lines:
'ALL THROUGH THEIR LIVING LIVES
then one day they slipped
into dungeons of time
SILENTLY unknown...'

I observed the poem emphasizes life and death.
The journey of human being from cradle to grave.

KINDNESS OF ALL ABOVE WHO READ MY WORKS OFF
AND mostly
ON
LOL
Thanks poets
life is a long journey
when 'twill end
no one knows
and your gods have a roll of 7.5 billions
as of now
don't burden him let him enjoy his ALGO what Rhythm
coupled by magnetism
eternal automation

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The loneliest hour
passes by gradually
in silence bestowed by heaven
who knows about time more than I
my heart throbs remain
in actual reality unbeknown

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AND LET LIVE
PLANE MISSED
SO SABBATICAL
missed

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