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All He Is (a cinquain)

Submitted by Candlewitch on Tue, 2023-02-28 08:17

Steven
incredible, fantastic
amazing affirming astounding
quiet absorbing studious factual
nurturing

Review Request (Intensity):

I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Review Request (Direction):

What did you think of my title?

How was my language use?

What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?

How does this theme appeal to you?

How was the beginning/ending of the poem?

Is the internal logic consistent?

Last few words:

a cinquain a cinquain Line 1: one word (a vocabulary word, a noun) Line 2: two adjectives that describe line one Line 3: three gerunds(verbs ending in ing pertaining to line one) Line 4: four words that describe line one Line 5: one word that sums up line (a synonym that sums up line one)

Editing stage:

Editing - rough draft

Content level:

Not Explicit Content

Comments

Geezer

Tue, 2023-02-28 08:36

Hmmmm...

I think that sooner or later, I shall have to try these cinquains. Nicely done, an affirmation of your love for Steven.
~ Geez.
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This must be the place, 'cause there ain't no place like this place anywhere near this place

Candlewitch

Tue, 2023-02-28 08:49

dear Geezer,

I have read that there a few different styles of it, but I do not know if that is true. thank you for reading and commenting. I appreciate that.

*hugs & good morning, Cat

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RoseBlack

Tue, 2023-02-28 17:31

A wonderful poem

Describing how you see your Steven and in my new favorite form. Well done!

~RoseBlack~

Candlewitch

Wed, 2023-03-01 06:26

hello Carrie!

thank you, I'm glad you enjoyed this poem. I can see why you like this form. it is appealing.

*hugs, Cat

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When someone reads your work
And responds, please be courteous
And reply in kind, thanks.

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Lavender

Tue, 2023-02-28 20:35

All He Is

Hi, Cat,
It sounds like Steven is nurturing - and all those lovely things in between! Very nice cinquain!
Lxx

Candlewitch

Wed, 2023-03-01 06:29

dear Lavender,

thank you for your words of support.

*hugs, Cat

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When someone reads your work
And responds, please be courteous
And reply in kind, thanks.

author comment

Rosewood Apothecary

Wed, 2023-03-01 05:00

I like the format

You got yourself a real dreamboat. You’re a lucky duck and you acknowledge it and I love it because I feel the same way. I like the way this format feels.

Tim

Candlewitch

Wed, 2023-03-01 06:32