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All eyes on me

Just so beautiful...

eyes are windows
through which you see...
they also show...
smile across the window...
all passersby will know...
that empty eyes love do blow

let all know
the eyes when they glow
or the final word they
all know

whistle me not,
no more
my eyes now don’t see nor show
and
all light has gone
like the whistling wind
all must know

eyes now speak no more
what to show
minds eyes remain back
in memories like candles flickering glow
till you your own eyes
also let go...
we all now know
eyes no more
smile nor glow!

Style / type: 
Free verse
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I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
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Comments

One of your better pieces, I am not going to point to anything that needs changing, read it, or let someone else rad it and then see with your ears, no eyes required, Yours Ian.T

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