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All Abide with me

Submitted by lovedly on Tue, 2015-12-22 14:11

Still abide with me....

You all are out of this world...
like me...
I am the sole soul
if there exists...
any....

take me along with you.....
as a butterfly does pollen....
then see what comes out

an enchanting progeny....
one like thee

Abide with me...
the winds are a blowing...
so still stay beside....
let the sunshine
as it used to ...

ere autumn

Till then stay warm within me...
Be not angry...

I will continue to compose
love poetry...
yes romantic
for all who continue to...
Just abide with me.....
Like the one who now
first does read
Queue up please

Okay now
continue to abide
as I now abide with thee....

Style / type:

Free verse

Review Request (Intensity):

I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing stage:

Editing - rough draft

Comments

Geremia

Tue, 2015-12-22 14:34

very nicely composed;

very nicely composed; excellent flow,and I especially liked the use of anaphora which held the verses together in a delightful "music." Well done, my friend.

joe

lovedly

Tue, 2015-12-22 14:44

Hello Joe

last week I was in Chicago
hadn't composed one
all said why was I ill?

so this came to my mind
another one is
'''The American Girl
she smiled....'
will compose in suitable time

Thanks you uplift me
the blood in my veins flow
gosh how I wish you'd know
coming from your pen
my mind does glow
my ink of poetry also does bestow
and that Joe you know.
Grateful this is my contribution to Stans upcoming work
with a Foreward from you Joe
thank you

author comment

Sparrow

Thu, 2015-12-24 04:13

Loved

Hope you didn't get the wind up in Chicago it has been known,
Good write there young Bard, a bit more than usual but it was good.
As usual a quiet few day, the usual crap write at the top of my screen:- You have no new updates. Keep writing!
Yours as always, The Bards Mentor, lol.
Have a great holiday, Tis humbug rang throughout the mornings song another year wont be long, though one day longer than the last..
Yours Ian..

.
Give critique to help keep Neopoet great.
Unconditional love to you all.
"Learn to love yourself first"
Yours as always, Ian.T, Sparrow, and Yenti

lovedly

Thu, 2015-12-24 18:57

high 5 Ian 2016 is a week slowly c o m i n gggg

TY TC GB

So kind of you,
no snow this year
you know
still we all are Merry
all know

Just returned from the mall
No Father Christmas at call
kids smiling away too

moms and pops are happy
saving on photographs
too costly
as always this day
but turkey all will have
that's well and okay

to all POETS in the world
I wish
a Happy New Year too
2016

author comment

Sparrow

Fri, 2015-12-25 18:43

Loved

I wish you one of the best years you can have.
Just ask for what you need.
Not what you want,
Then extras will be so wonderful.
Take care young Bard and know we think of you,
Yours as always, Ian, Anne and the children..

.
Give critique to help keep Neopoet great.
Unconditional love to you all.
"Learn to love yourself first"
Yours as always, Ian.T, Sparrow, and Yenti

lovedly

Sat, 2015-12-26 13:45