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Acrostic

Deep down inside of my soul

Enveloped by a dark endless hole

Parasitic in nature to my heart

Reaching into my broken parts

Everyone thinks that I am sane

Sanity is my illusion by name

Something that I will never see

Inside it hurts to much of me

Once a day happiness I can feign

Nothing matters to the pain

Sitting home in the dark all alone

Under my bed hides what is gone

I must take a rest from my pain

Crying helps me to reset again

I know one night that I will go away

Deliver myself from my slow decay

Everyone will know but no one will care

Slowly I will end all of my despair

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Please use care (this is a sensitive subject for me, do not critique harshly)
Last few words: 
I thought I would try a new poetry style. It is called Acrostic in which the first letter (or syllable, or word) of each line (or paragraph, or other recurring feature in the text) spells out a word, message or the alphabet. This is my first time trying it.
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Content level: 
Not Explicit Content

Comments

I believe you have succeeded with your attempt here. It’s an interesting concept (acrostic). I’ve not seen this in poetry so I learned a new thing! Thanks! The bands I listen to occasionally do this with the first letter of each song in the set list of their concerts. I’m not a stranger to depression. It’s terrible. If you ever need to talk you can drop me a message. You write well, let’s see more later today. I look forward to you perspectives. Things aren’t always rosey and it’s ok to feel depressed or hopeless sometimes. If the writing helps I love that for you.

Walk in the light,
Tim

Your first trial was excellent! Keep on with your new style and write more...
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"By virtue of creativity, my literary genre is poetry".

~Jackweb

I am familiar with the Acrostic form of poetry. I have tried a few myself. they exercise the mind. your's is excellent! I'm sad to say that I can also relate to your subject matter. great job!

*hugs, Cat

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With acrostics and the overall composition of the poem. I am all too familiar with depression and what it does to the soul. I am glad you find writing to be beneficial. Excellent job.

~RoseBlack~

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