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Acknowledge Me...

She's waiting in the wings
for a place in the spotlight
the work she's done for it
all culminates tonight

She's ranged far, so far
in search of tales to tell
brought them to the Master
who weaves them into spells

Spells to enchant the reader
suspend belief and more
Looking for the tales
behind forbidden doors

She trembles, nervous, prickles
Now here he comes, his majesty.
He's through the list of thank You's.
Bb but, he's forgotten all about ME!

He's shaking hands and smiling
walks right out the door
I wonder if he's thinking
he doesn't need me anymore?

I've been thinking of vacation.
on some deserted isle
Maybe, I should leave tonight.
give him space for just awhile?

She feels a gentle kiss
on her velvet cheek and then
"Congratulations to my muse
the one that moves my pen"

A storm rolled through the valley
late that steamy jungle-night
a salty breeze cleansed the air
soon she was out of sight

The writer gently snores
doesn't fret, not ever
She is off to find a mystery
but her heart is with him forever

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Structured: Western
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Last few words: 
I don't know if muses are on the endangered list, but you don't hear much about them anymore. I try to take good care of mine; she gets lots of stimulation, and I keep her fresh in my mind. She never ages a day and is always perfect. Take good care of your muse, and she/he/it will serve you well.
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of sexism raises its' ugly head!
Did you not read my "Last few words?"
My very last line reveals the way I have always thought of muses.
"She/He/It". I knew a guy that had little children for his muses,
and another that had a dragon-like creature for a muse.
The fact that I portray my muse as a lovable, pretty woman,
proves your own question, if you ask me. She uses her intellect, wit and
caring nature to bring me stories that will tear your heart out, make one laugh,
and in general, provide such wonderful material for my stories.

I'm guessing that what really got you going, is the reference to her
"Master" and "His majesty". I don't happen to see her as a subservient
creature who sees her master as a detriment to her. Besides, she chose me!
I was hoping for a monstrous critter that would provide me with tales of horror
to match my "Killer" theme. I don't know how she managed to get assigned to me!

As to your challenge? I have decided to accept! She is willing to trade one of
her fellow muse: [who btw, just became a muse recently, after petitioning
to a hereto all female cult] on the grounds of it being sexual- discrimination.

~ Geezer.
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Writing purely for oneself, is the ultimate in defensive posture.

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my favorite lines are:

She feels a gentle kiss
on her velvet cheek and then
"Congratulations to my muse
the one that moves my pen"

my muse is a "feeling" more than a sex, a majestic feeling that leaves me tingling. but also I have eddy styx who has his own muse who brings on the darkness of his realm.

I think your poem is gorgeous and find no fault. I hope this poem is a candidate for poem of the week.

*both, Cat & eddy

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When someone reads your work
And responds, please be courteous
And reply in kind, thanks.

Thank you for explanation of what your muse feels like to you.
I think it gives my stance a bit more credibility. ~ Geez.
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Writing purely for oneself, is the ultimate in defensive posture.

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This poem has taken me out of my present and I've been imagining the feelings and romanism. That's the good one there.

to hear your opinion, thanks for the read and comments. ~ Geezer.
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Writing purely for oneself, is the ultimate in defensive posture.

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I thoroughly enjoy the relationship you have with your muse and how you give her credit for her role in your writing successes. You are a romantic at heart!

~RoseBlack~

I guess that she must have seen that in me. Or maybe she thought to balance out the "Killer" mode? She still brings me tales from the Killer side, but I notice she doesn't visit him as often as she used to. I will have to speak to her about that. Well, off to visit the wizard! We have been challenged to write as a female author, so she has invited a friend to switch places for a poem written by a woman with the muse of a man. Could be a rather interesting piece! Thanks for your read and comments. ~ Geez.
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Writing purely for oneself, is the ultimate in defensive posture.

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To have switched from my murderous frame of mind for a while as well- short lived as that was...I look forward to seeing your latest challenge.

~RoseBlack~

must be amused reading this. Many f great lines. I hope mine will bring me something to weave tonight as well.
Thank you for sharing sir

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she thought that the whole thing was great! She is so proud of the job we have done. Thank you for your read and comment. My muse says that she will speak to yours about bringing you a great story. ~ Geez.
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Writing purely for oneself, is the ultimate in defensive posture.

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I think this is wonderful. I think it's done with the tender touch to a loved one. Not necessarily a lover. My muse often sings to me in rhyme and then the other muse the one who writes freestyle slips in. And then at the rare times they get together they create wonder.

I like to think anyway. I love how you've personalised her and given her personality. She feels tangible and real after this read.

In a way she is. She's the songs of heaven come to life in word.

I Loved it!

Love & higgliest bugs Sis xxx

I'm emotionally wrung out I'll come back this afternoon and see if I can't offer some suggestions. I finished the poem, well the first one, for Dad.

"My head is broken but unbowed" - William Ernest Henley

Hello, Geezer,
Wonderful, interesting poem! I believe my muse to be strong and independent and will come and go as she pleases, but if I don't listen to her when she speaks, she distracts me until I acknowledge her. I really like this piece from its clever title to its devoted ending.
Thank you!
L

my friends and fellow poets for the inspiration that we get from them. I am particularly indebted to my muse. She has given me such great stories and made me the poet that I am in spite of my lazy ways, and efforts to slack off. Thanks for the read and comments. ~ Geez.
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Writing purely for oneself, is the ultimate in defensive posture.

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It’s difficult to personify. Closest I could come to describing it would be a picture I created of myself in my adult body equipped with all my experience but with the idealism of youth both intact and shattered. Constantly at odds with each other in educated conversations. Sometimes they aren’t civil. That’s what I write and they both shut up and watch in awe.

You’re certainly in touch and I commend you for your dedication to the craft and your muse. May she never forsake you, may you ever protect her divine heart.

Tim

Seems as though I have only one muse, but then I have my Killer and
Sir Gee to take care of the bickering, and their personalities are
opposite and distracting enough. In order to achieve the goal of
writing like a female with the muse of a man, I shall have to create
another personality. Damn! I guess I should have kept my mouth shut
and just taken the brow-beating that I was getting. But...
We will get through this and prove that we can do anything! Ahhhh, hahaha

~ Geez.
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Writing purely for oneself, is the ultimate in defensive posture.

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permit to say
All poets about the earth
I read ....dozens daily
Provide the muse
one is looking for excitingly
AND
permit me to elaborate
your muse has generated
so many muses
creator you are Gee

Hope you will through the romanticism that exists
manly or womanly
X AND Y
are still needed
to create poetrick history
of that let there be no more mystery
as I still muse to amuse all
Neos
@83

you do amuse, especially when you pretend to be innocent and lacking in skill. Thank you for the read and comment. ~ Geez.
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Writing purely for oneself, is the ultimate in defensive posture.

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