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Absence

Love isn't a burden
until it is gone
A failure of stone
I thought was forever

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It's probably just me, but I get the first two lines and the third just escapes my reasoning. Was it meant to do that?

Thomas

....so like my lost dreams...the flood

Thanks for stopping by Tri. The third line was intended to convey that we often take our loved ones (or lost loves...) for granted, and that they will always be there for us.

Cheers

Michael Anthony

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Also, a lot of my poetry is inspired by the brevity of haiku, sometimes this works to the poem's advantage, and sometimes I may miss the mark. Merry Christmas!

Cheers

Michael Anthony

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I was trying to apply weight measure to the word "stone". Cheers, and Merry Christmas to you as well.

Thomas

....so like my lost dreams...the flood

right away! Good stuff! ~ Geez.
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When you are writing for the Random Challenge!
Example: "I Need To Recharge" is prompt.
title is "Plugging In" It should appear this way:
"Plugging In" - Random Challenge/ I Need To Recharge

Brevity often requires the reader to think.......thanks for the headache lmao

It uncovers the heavy Metaphor in the poem. The impact of metaphor is to represent ideas through comparison. It allows poets to convey vivid imagery that transcends literary meanings , creates images that are easier to understand and respond to than literal language.

Simple verse but needs a poetic mind to break it apart.

Well written Michael Anthony

Onyinyechi Cosmos

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