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Abide with me again

Submitted by lovedly on Mon, 2016-04-04 12:48

Of who and what
and
the why fore
Would you like to leave
a message
of a God created
by man
as nature came first

should there be Religion
should there be Visa
or only Americans are exceptions
if so why!

Shouldn’t gather together
this world’s
Intelligencia
and
lead human all from darkness
in to the wisdom
called light
and seep and creep out of the blindness
where mostly today man does reside
many here since ages in caves beside

be free like me
an eagle that I be
at every airport is my home
I guarantee
just tell me and I’ll meet ye

Now Abide with me!

Style / type: 
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity): 
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing stage: 
Editing - rough draft

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alidzain

Tue, 2016-04-05 13:42

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lovedly

Tue, 2016-04-05 00:27

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alidz please post separately on walls yours
joe also and geezer too advised u
thank you more will read you too

Of who and what
and
the why fore
Would you like to leave
a message
of a God created
by man
as nature came first

should there be Religion
should there be Visa
or only Americans are exceptions
if so why!

Shouldn’t gather together
this world’s
Intelligencia
and
lead human all from darkness
in to the wisdom
called light
and seep and creep out of the blindness
where mostly today man does reside
many here since ages in caves beside

be free like me
an eagle that I be
at every airport is my home
I guarantee
just tell me and I’ll meet ye

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alidzain

Tue, 2016-04-05 13:42

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Fine. This would be the last time I think I'm going to show how your works inspire me. You are wrong. Joe actually likes it. Gee told me off not because of my poetry but because he thinks I'm showcasing myself when I'm honoring Joe and I'm just starting a conversation as friends to show how people like him inspire me. That issue has been resolved. I did ask Joe if I have offended him but he said "no". Expect very little of my comments to come because I don't knoe how else to interact with you when I HATE to repeat the same comments again and again. I see this piece as a question and I answer it. I dont see people telling off Esker with his commenting and I didn't see anything wrong with it. Each of us has our own way of commenting. Of late, I'm feeling something lacking here and I want to change that but since Ive always been misunderstood, I think why do I even bother. Whatever. Bye

Alid

lovedly

Tue, 2016-04-05 19:37

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you can have many more rides

I'd hate to lose a friend in you
as only here I inspire you

so forgive Sir

PLEASE DO MORE POETRY SIRE
FROM ALL MY WORKS ENTIRE
SHRED OFF ALL ANGER
okay caps removed

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Sparrow

Tue, 2016-04-05 03:44

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Your last comment echoed a verse I read a while ago.
There in the infinity of spaces gaze were born humons
They could not comprehend the vastness of the things around them, and the beauty perceived, so they had to blame something , but no they invented a god to hold onto, someone to blame, someone to talk to in their infinite loneliness, yet all they had to do was look inward.
There without distraction lives the essence of being a living thinking creature.
Here they could find if they tried the answer to everything, a giant 42 so small it had to be searched for to exist.
So we must learn that the beauty and eternal life is held in a quiet space, that we continuously seek,
Yours with that love of the inside, Ian..

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Yours as always, Ian.T, Sparrow, and Yenti

lovedly

Tue, 2016-04-05 11:03

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we need a GOD
so we invented him
well Ian you have lots of appreciation
meet me in ZURICH
any time ur welcome

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weirdelf

Tue, 2016-04-05 17:13

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This is not plagiarism, it's perfectly ok to use the same title as another poem.
In context Lyte was referring to god, as are you. As Heinlein put it in "Stranger In A Strange Land"- Thou Art God. You, me, everyone, except perhaps Donald Trump [grins].

Abide with me again, something lost and re-found, perhaps in Airport rest-rooms?

cheers,
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lovedly

Tue, 2016-04-05 19:43

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you alone have taught this horse
how to trot

but I miss your kicks
its been long since

hope you are well
unlike me
I am in one really

missed you so very dearly
those who guide are found rarely
a distinct commodity....
H O N E S T L Y !

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