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3 4 1
Three for just one
Out in the clouds
rolling wet
she still wonders yet
She awaits his decision
now or later
whenever
In that moment
of chaos
he wondered
where to kiss first
But what can you say
about a man
in the desert
What comes
nearest first
thrust!
or
thirst...
Style / type:
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity):
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing stage:
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Comments
Sparrow
Wed, 2016-02-24 19:37
Loved
A mix here, being in the wet and the desert at the same time, and not knowing ones own state, rest springs to mind then there will be plenty of time for other things,
This needs some filling in there are gaps, more story please,
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lovedly
Wed, 2016-02-24 20:25
even in the dry desert
women feel the orgasm