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Systematic Crashes...
I don't know why it happens
there is no warning, reason, rhyme
but crashes are drawn to me
they happen all the time
There should be some alarm
"This system's going to fail"
I could prevent a nervous break-down
and another computer-sale
Style / type:
Structured: Western
Review Request (Intensity):
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Last few words:
Written for Lou's Splash-Pool workshop.
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Region & Country
New York State - USA
Favorite Poets
Poe, Emily Dickenson, Robert Frost, Shakespeare, and many of the poets here at Neopoet.
Comments
scribbler
Sun, 2011-12-11 18:00
hi Geez
Reckon I covered all I wanted to say in workshop. Now if people want to know what was said they should have joined up lol............stan
Geezer
Tue, 2011-12-13 18:11
Yep...
you're right! ~ Gee
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author commentwesley snow
Sun, 2011-12-11 22:32
A curious little poem.
My computer bit the big one a few months back. A major pain to replace the drive. wesley
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Geezer
Tue, 2011-12-13 18:12
Did you...
do it yourself? Curious... ~ Gee
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author commentlou
Wed, 2011-12-14 04:07
Hi
Gee,
first of sll in my opinion, all that needs changing is the last line, maybe uou could say something like, 'another wiff of hysteria.
lou
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