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Stain

Stain

Hemlock creeping through my veins.
Limbs numb by degrees .
But my ability to live remains.

Losing everything slashing imperceptibly
no visible mark, or contusions.
successive illusions. 

Mental strain unapparent
Internalized, coiled within my guts
Holding on so as not to cause pain
 
Can't fool or hide from myself,
but no one else can detect 
that I am eviscerated.

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Your wee brain did very well LOL !!!

The poem refers to the mental strain caused by medical issues. Glad you liked it. Note to self, must cheer up LMAO !!

Lou

Stand tall, be proud to be who you are, give the world the finger!!!!

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I believe I know where you are coming from.

Well constructed free verse and an awesome ending

cheers,
Jess
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Thank you.

Lou

Stand tall, be proud to be who you are, give the world the finger!!!!

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