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Secret...

Submitted by Geezer on Sun, 2011-08-07 11:19

Be bold...
Let the world know how you feel
Be scared...
You don't know how it will turn out
Dream...
Fantasy is often better than the reality
Do...
What are the consequences?
Question...
The madness of your thoughts
Share...
And be revealed

Style / type: 
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity): 
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Review Request (Direction): 
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How does this theme appeal to you?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?
Is the internal logic consistent?
Editing stage: 
Editing - rough draft

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Candlewitch

Mon, 2011-08-08 10:46

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This is good advice for anyone!

p.s.

I miss Jayne (seren)

always, Cat

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Geezer

Mon, 2011-08-08 13:13

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I didn't mean it as advice, at least not to anyone else. It was intended as a reflective piece. However, I do see now that it might be good advice. I wonder about the things I do and the ways that they might impact others. Sometimes I worry about being selfish. I miss her too! ~ Love ya, ~ Gee

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