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My Echo
You are an echo
A gentle whisper that comes back to me
When I stand on the edge of a cliff
And scream into the darkness
You don’t try to yell back
Or overpower my emotions
You are soft in your response
Not trying to tell me what to do
It’s more like you are just letting me know
You are there
You are listening
You care
You are an echo
That keeps me from feeling alone
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Hello my friends I have been gone for so long but it is good to be back. every since the site went down I just haven't been much in the mood to write but here is a little one I wrote just the other day. I hope you like it
Randy
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lou
Sat, 2011-04-02 13:30
Hobo
Simple beauty
Love Lou
Stand tall, be proud to be who you are, give the world the finger!!!!
hobo
Sat, 2011-04-02 14:33
Thank you
Thank you my friend, I like how simple it is too
You can never pick anyone up if you are busy putting them down
author commenthobo
Sat, 2011-04-02 14:34
Thank you
Thank you for you comment. I am the hobo I am always falling in love lol. I hope it comes across that way :)
You can never pick anyone up if you are busy putting them down
author commentscribbler
Sat, 2011-04-02 20:43
hi
yes I did like it and can suggest no changes...................stan
hobo
Sun, 2011-04-03 11:45
Thanks Stan
Thank you Stan I am glad you like it
You can never pick anyone up if you are busy putting them down
author commenthobo
Sun, 2011-04-03 11:47
you put a smile
You put a smile on my face my friend. Thank you
You can never pick anyone up if you are busy putting them down
author commentmagics02
Sun, 2011-04-03 14:11
Echoes
Your echo is in the wind calling out to speak your tune here. Just wanted to say that a whisper you hear to the winds are to fly by you and capture that space of time you also hear the echoes of your own soul speaking. Good one here.
Blessings
Mona Mia
hobo
Sun, 2011-04-03 14:30
Thank you
Thank you Mona Mia I am glad you like it. I am really quite fond of this one myself. it is so good to see again
You can never pick anyone up if you are busy putting them down
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