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ON MISSING THINGS
I will miss the acrobatic squirrels
as they vault from tree to tree
searching for an acorn treat
while they fuss and bark at me.
I will miss the speedy rabbits
as they sprint from the brier patch
brown blurs dodging red tail hawks
when they dive beneath the thatch.
I will even miss the feral hogs
all their grunting as they root about
snuffling for some roots and grubs
with their blunt and muddy snout.
I shall miss the graceful deer
with polished antlers standing tall.
If I don't sight my rifle in
I fear that I shall miss them all.
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Barbara Writes
Fri, 2011-08-26 00:02
beautiful
I like this. It brought back the memories i cherished this summer of squirrels jumping from tree to tree in my back yard as i look out my sliding glass door from my den.
i even cherished the memories of squirrels dashing for the woods as i drove into my yard.
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Roscoe Lane
Fri, 2011-08-26 00:13
You got,
You got me right to the end, a beautiful picture painted in words. Exploded in words. Regards Roscoe
Roscoe Llane,
Religion will rip your faith off, and return
for the mask of disbelief that's left.
scribbler
Sat, 2011-08-27 09:43
hi Roscoe
Just a play on the phrase of missing something lol..........stan
author commentweirdelf
Fri, 2011-08-26 04:09
I'm reminded, for some reason, of the Ogden Nash poem
I think that I shall never see
a billboard lovely as a tree
perhaps unless the billboards fall
I'll never see a tree at all.
The first three stanzas are basic pastorale, then a Jeffrey Archer punchline. A bit cheap mate.
A few notes on meter
searching for a big acorn [places unatural stress on orn in acorn]
when they burrow underneath the thatch [would scan beter as-]
when they burrow under thatch
I fear that I shall miss them all
I fear I'll miss them all
rhyme works well.
cheers,
Jess
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scribbler
Sat, 2011-08-27 09:47
hi Jess
I'm always going back and tinkering with stuff and will keep your ideas in mind when I do so with this.........stan
author commentscribbler
Sat, 2011-08-27 09:49
hi Rose
A bad knee has already diminished the lengths of my forest wanderings. I am pleased that you have a garden you can visit among the stark urban landscape............stan
author commentCandlewitch
Sun, 2022-04-10 15:32
dear Scribbler,
thanks so very much for recommending this poem...I was surprised by the ending. a good laugh!
*hugs, Cat
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scribbler
Fri, 2023-02-03 14:36
Welcome
I didn't want you to miss it lol
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