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LIGHT (a Rhyku)
Late summer's sunshine
filters through tired wrinkled leaves
casting dappled shadows on the duff
which tremble with each passing breeze
*Rhyku- A poem with three to four lines of which at least two must rhyme and none be longer than seven words
Style / type:
Structured: Western
Review Request (Intensity):
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
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Comments
scribbler
Wed, 2011-08-31 19:55
Hi Rose
I am pleased to bring you along to the forest via this little poem.....................stan
author commentEduardo Cruz
Wed, 2011-08-31 20:21
Stan,
Your branching out. LOL
good for you, I love it when I see poets try new things.
You're becoming much more.
Eddie
LIFE ISN'T ABOUT WAITING FOR THE STORM TO PASS
IT'S ABOUT LEARNING HOW TO DANCE IN THE RAIN.
VIVIAN GREENE
scribbler
Wed, 2011-08-31 20:44
Hi Eddie
Failing trying something new, I even invent things now and then. So far have tried Metered rhyme, free verse, sonnet, Haiku, Prose, Poetic prose, Concrete, Acrostic and invented Parallel, Rhyku and Morphing. Must be jack of all trades and master of none lol.Thanks for the kind comment.............stan
author commentLenny of Cohen
Wed, 2011-08-31 20:22
Nailed
it Stan! Love this!
L
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"Death" is nonsense: what is there to die?
"Life"? How could " life" "die"? That is a contradiction
in terms. Can "light" become "darkness"?
"Light" can only cease to be apparent
Wei Wu Wei
scribbler
Wed, 2011-08-31 20:45
Hello
I am pleased you liked this enough to leave such kind comment.............stan
author commentscribbler
Thu, 2011-09-01 08:09
hi Lonnie
Thanks for such kind comment, but you typoed depress lol..........stan
author commentraj
Thu, 2011-09-01 09:23
Stan
Rosi and Lonnie have said before me of what i would have also said...i will add...it runs as smooth as a nicely blended scotch....
thanks for elaborating on what a Rhyku is..i had never heard of this before..i would surely like to have a go at it...are you sure that "none should be longer than seven word? or should it be syllables?...
raj (sublime_ocean)
scribbler
Thu, 2011-09-01 11:20
hi raj
I am glad you like this. And the word count per line is no more than seven. When I came up with this I wanted count to not depend upon how a word might be pronounced differently such as evening...is it 3 syllables or two? In Rhyku it doesn't matter, it's one word. I hope you Do try this out............stan
author commentraj
Thu, 2011-09-01 15:21
Thanks Stan for the
Thanks Stan for the clarifications...i will surely have a go at this new format...
raj (sublime_ocean)