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Last You Knew

Last you knew I was a wreck, alone again
Lost my heart in a fire that grew from sin
Held her hands to my face, she pulled away
Captured my soul with nothing to say

Last you knew I was in love, alone again
Left my hands in the fire of love and then
Pulled away from the ones who cared for me
Sheltered my heart in selfish ways, you see?

And then I knew, I was lost in the sea
Caught in the waves of love and jealousy
Pulled by the currents that lead you to me
Drowned in the dark, in misery

Last you knew I was upset, alone again
Drank the wine, made mistakes and then
Pulled myself together just to call you
Tell you I love and need you
And then you said,” we’ve became, so different”

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Free verse
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I enjoyed reading this but wonder who you didn't carry repetition of alone again all the way through........stan

thanks for reading, i am happy you liked it. which part were you wondering about me leaving the repetition off? was it the first line of the third stanza?
thanks

-with what love could be...

Washing Tears

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thank you xena, living in the past is something i need to get out of, i keep missing out on today!
thanks for reading! have a great day!

-with what love could be...

Washing Tears

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Oh that last line! It tugged my heart.

The poem is very well written.

cheers,
Jess
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Jess, i am relieved to know that some things may still pull at your heart strings, i know you're not the biggest fan of 'love' poems, so that means a lot to hear that from you.
thanks for the time you spent reading this one, i really do appreciate it.

-with what love could be...

Washing Tears

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