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If there is a God
I dreamed of words
bound in white kerchiefs,
signs waving in the shadowed valley of death.
By the time I had awakened
only my breath remained,
I do not know what words to choose
though a river or reconciliation flows
through sunlit dreams.
I cannot pluck harmonies
from the air to give to those who choose
to be right and call God to their side.
Do crop circles lie in crossing patterns? Does Stonehenge
offer a circle that proves stones speak?
I can not wipe hunger from the faces of children
and feed the race mind with the bounty of earth.
Who understands these things of war, these weapons
that can not spare a moment of self-reflection?
Death is the final act of living, and flowers never commit
suicide. They grow in the most unlikely of places.
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Comments
Barbara Writes
Wed, 2011-08-24 00:19
Anna
I didn't get that feel for this one , so I can't say. what it means to me. but I like the ending. I see that flowers do grow in the unlikely of places the heart of a person.
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weirdelf
Fri, 2011-08-26 05:23
I've realised why I so seldom comment on your poems.
Your imagery, meaning and spiritual content are exemplary and beyond criticism.
I just wish you would learn some prosodic craft, to make your read more accessible.
cheers,
Jess
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Kailashana2
Fri, 2011-08-26 05:51
Talk to the muse, Jess! ~A
Talk to the muse, Jess!
~A
author commentweirdelf
Fri, 2011-08-26 06:08
cop out
the muse provides the inspiration, the brain provides the craft.
cheers,
Jess
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'Rhythm and Meter in Poetry'
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Kailashana2
Fri, 2011-08-26 06:24
Ha! Subtle advertisement?
Ha! Subtle advertisement? Lol. Of course, I'll join. Who knows maybe I'll be the next Dr. Seuss. ;-)
whoever Anna is
isn't
her whiskers twitching
her tale itching
nine lives
of poet archives
~A
author commentweirdelf
Sat, 2011-08-27 23:45
Not an ad
a mere suggestion
cheers,
Jess
A new workshop on the most important element of poetry-
'Rhythm and Meter in Poetry'
https://www.neopoet.com/workshop/rhythm-and-meter-poetry
Kailashana2
Fri, 2011-08-26 08:11
"Learn my craft." Indeed.
"Learn my craft." Indeed. With every poem I write and rewrite (my life's poem) I learn.
EH?
~A
author commentweirdelf
Sat, 2011-08-27 23:46
but you suck at meter.
go on, deny it
cheers,
Jess
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'Rhythm and Meter in Poetry'
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Kailashana2
Fri, 2011-08-26 09:26
Depends on how you read me.
Depends on how you read me. Maybe your reading is tongue-tangled and you can't wrap your head around the rhythm.
~A
author commentweirdelf
Sat, 2011-08-27 23:48
oh, yes, I can screw up readings
Perhaps your work surpasses my abilities.
But a little practice can go a long way.
cheers,
Jess
A new workshop on the most important element of poetry-
'Rhythm and Meter in Poetry'
https://www.neopoet.com/workshop/rhythm-and-meter-poetry