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Guardian Angel (Mirror/rorriM)

Guardian Angel

when it's all over

only the wanting remains

the struggle goes unspoken

whispering Grandma's name

you feels the stirring echoes

of your Grandma's heart's gentle touch

you couldn't find words to tell her

you misses her so terribly much

now she's your special angel

watching down from above

guiding your uncertain footsteps

tenderly with all her love

knowing her spirit never left you

will bring comfort from the pain

when the struggle goes unspoken

her love will shelter you from the rain...

(* this poem is going into the manuscript Mirror/rorriM)

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Awesome as usual, i find it hard to find fault

love lou

Stand tall, be proud to be who you are, give the world the finger!!!!

and thanks, Lou!

always, Cat

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