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Bizarre
Blind folded feeling my way
strange sensations
sharp scratches,
pricking indecision.
Bizarre trepidation
feted remains of consciousness,
shards of terror
severing.
Lifting the veil,
quiescent power,
endowed with uncharted
depths.
Conquer the demons
gnawing at my resolution.
I will prevail.
strike the walls down.
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Region & Country
West London
Favorite Poets
Pablo Neruda, Jack Kerouac, Alan Ginsberg, D.H Lawrence, Jim Morrison's lyrics
Comments
Geezer
Wed, 2011-08-17 19:16
I am...
impressed! Wow! I see this as perfect, just as it is! Sorry I didn't make it to your chat Sat. I had to work. I wish that the hours didn't separate us so. i would liked to have been there. Were there many people there? My chat consisted of me and Press, and he didn't show until about 9:15 p.m. Oh well, I think things will pick up in late fall, early winter, when people start staying home and inside more. ~ Love ya, Gee
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lou
Wed, 2011-08-17 21:11
Gee
I've been meaning to get in touch, the time difference is a pain. I feel terrible that I missed your chat. My chat was ok there were around 6 of us if you include me, things should pick up once people return from their vacations.
I'm glad that you like my poem, Dan tweaked it a little. I'll pm you later.
Lou
Stand tall, be proud to be who you are, give the world the finger!!!!
author commentlou
Thu, 2011-08-18 03:39
Thanks Ian
Thanks for pointing out that I'm repeating myself, it's either premature senility,
or as I have known for while, i'm a bit stale.I need to find the next step, but It has to be a natural development. But my themes will continue to be up front and emotional in some way, I know that for sure.
Lou
Stand tall, be proud to be who you are, give the world the finger!!!!
author commentlou
Thu, 2011-08-18 04:21
LMAO!!!
Ian you are a complete and utter nutter, but a I like that about you. Sort out the meds LOL !!
Lou
Stand tall, be proud to be who you are, give the world the finger!!!!
author commentEsker
Thu, 2011-08-18 19:14
"strike the walls down"
must be a Gaelic saying or latin
Im certian of my Viking origins
(scot with red hair and fair eyes with my ojibway blood)
thats my fave line of this marvelous brave work
lou
Fri, 2011-08-19 03:13
Steven
Thank you, I'm glad you liked the poem. Dan helped me with that line.
Lou
Stand tall, be proud to be who you are, give the world the finger!!!!
author commentCandlewitch
Wed, 2011-08-24 09:26
Dear Lou,
Conquer the demons
gnawing at my resolution.
I will prevail.
strike the walls down.
I do like the idea of this piece! We all have demons, don't we?
always, Cat
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And responds, please be courteous
And reply in kind, thanks.
lou
Wed, 2011-08-24 10:45
Cat
Yes we do unfortunately .
Cheers
Love Lou
Stand tall, be proud to be who you are, give the world the finger!!!!
author commentEduardo Cruz
Wed, 2011-08-24 12:12
lou
The box that holds us, and stops our creativity. What's the saying: "The world is my oyster" yeah but first we must break the chains and shell that keeps us from it.
Enjoyed this write very much. it was easy to relate to in my own world.
Bravisima!
Eddie
LIFE ISN'T ABOUT WAITING FOR THE STORM TO PASS
IT'S ABOUT LEARNING HOW TO DANCE IN THE RAIN.
VIVIAN GREENE