Join the Neopoet online poetry workshop and community to improve as a writer, meet fellow poets, and showcase your work. Sign up, submit your poetry, and get started.

bed and breakfast rooms, free-range birds out on limb, peering in

a thousand rainbows, a thousand days
not one of them without you
not much pillow talk
that isn't a funerary dirge
motivational tapes
gestating in leaves yet to unfurl
their victories

after the talking, undefined, unrefined,
uncalculated sex. hot. gravid. real.
there is nowhere that is not touched;
I still like you and we never emerge from desire,
craving the constant, illusive "it",
shapeshifters two,
it's complicated and yet it isn't
shapes, sounds colours and forms within forms
we build nests, not walls,
spaceships, not self-defeating programs
replicating thin eggshells in alternate realities,

After sex a well-polished apple....bite hard and long, savor.

(Thanks Barry, Theo and Terry for the inspiration.

Last few words: 
ok. what u think? ~A
Editing stage: 

Comments

There's just so much to appreciate about this piece! The clever use of metaphor, the repitition of negatives to enhance the opposite! Why the very unfolding of the tale.... BUT! the title! It reminds me of the adage: 'what you say speaks so loudly, I can't hear you!'.
IMO it detracts a lot of mystery and magic from the poem. Please reconsider!
Thanks
PP

Bonitaj

Well, it's six of one and half a dozen of another. Some folks won't read it because, and some folks will read it just because, dear Boni.

Much like a bird in the hand, so to speak.

However, the poem was meant to disguise the fact that the world is our nest, and we've been shitting in it for a long long time. Love, however, is the last vestige of a free-range bird.

;-)

~A

p.s. I knew the title was not quite appropriate, if I or someone else concludes a better, more expedient, prudent title, I'll gladly reconsider.

If only on Tuesdays. ;-)

author comment

I'm reading a publication on some psychological treatise called: "THE BAD EDITION" which brought me to suggest THE BED EDITION to you... ;)
See what you think! I certainly think it's enigmatic enough to draw in some readers, without offending others ! ;)
Cheers
Boni

Bonitaj

love all the choices A! Let's see what the others think!
Boni

Bonitaj

Birds in the Hand? I get the simile now, but it took you telling me. ~ Gee

There is value to commenting and critique, tell us how you feel about our work.
This must be the place, 'cause there ain't no place like this place anywhere near this place.

(c) Neopoet.com. No copyright is claimed by Neopoet to original member content.