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Awareness

Her eyes
never allowed
boredom
upon her heart.

Each light, or shadow
held a secret treasure,
a passionate perspective
awaiting to be unlocked
and displayed.

When she shared
her vision
my humbled glance
gathered in
so splendid a moment
I paused in awe.

Style / type: 
Free verse
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Last few words: 
Written in response to an absolutely stunning set of photos taken by someone I know.
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Comments

A picture worth 1000 words eh? Some photos are impossible to describe in words. Got a few ideas that you can think on :
change awaiting to waiting

My humbled glance
gathered
in so splendid a moment..........just a thought...........stan

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