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AWAITING AUTUMN

All is still and summer green
(far too hot for most to stir)
Wild life is hidden by leaves' screen
Insect calls are a quiet purr.

In midst of season all still grows
fawns, squirrel kits and even plants.
The living forest rests, it knows,
that soon will come the harvest dance.

Anticipation slowly builds
as August quietly rolls around.
Crops putting on their final yield
sustenance from warm dry ground.

Even the wind now holds still
hounds barely glance at a stray hare.
Birds sing with a muted trill.
Lazy bees hum in the air.

It seems the poplars can not wait.
They have a couple leaves of gold
as they strive to meet their fate
when autumn turns their fellows bold.

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In midst of season all yet grows : fawns, squirrel kits(baby squirrels) and even plants. See if that clarifies meaning. Sometime typos swarm around my index finger and have to be shooed off by others lol. Thanks for taking time to come by and do the shooing.........stan

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It's kind of funny how many different names there are for young animals. Should not expect folks to know as many as I might......stan

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Just put me in a big city and try to give me directions via a subway and see who gets lost lol. We are all most comfortable in familiar surroundings ............stan

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Hi Stan, I love your poem, everything about it. The title, the content and the rhyming. To think here in the S.H. we've hardly finished Winter. It's still snowing!
Your imagery is fantastic, I feel your poetry. Will return, 'tis late. All the best.

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"My soul is painted like the wings of butterflies; fairy tales of yesterday will grow but never die, I can fly, my friends.” – Freddie Mercury

The highs her are still in the nineties (F) so I can't hardly wait for the next 6 weeks to pass and cooler temps to arrive. Thanks for the visit

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