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bent ( Clichés workshop--only one cliché allowed)
following the sun
I am all bent out of shape
like patterns of light
refracting light shaped
into two more limbs bending
arcs into circles
drops of sky falling
into water, skipping stones
across the music.
Review Request (Intensity):
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Last few words:
Cliché workshop--only one cliché allowed....set into 3 haiku/senyru patterns.
Cliché is *bent out of shape*.
Editing stage:
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Comments
Hooded Stranger
Sat, 2011-07-02 06:09
Anna
Anna,
you clever girl, this is wickedly intelligent.
Haiku's and cliches...maybe a Haiches...or a Cliku?
Good stuff...enjoyed it,
HS
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With all that I am and all that I could be, I walk this earth, yet nobody sees me.
Kailashana2
Sat, 2011-07-02 06:28
Ok, what's my prize? Can I
Ok, what's my prize? Can I drive it? And does it go zoom zoom? Can I wear it and does it sparkle like a ...............?
Dan, I reiterate, these workshops are sooooooooooooo much fun, gets one out of one's prime directive, so to speak. And that is a good thing for writers.
~A
author commentHooded Stranger
Sat, 2011-07-02 06:35
Anna
Anna,
I have to say I haven't seen people interacting so well, and even making fun and nobody getting upset for a long long time...hopefully this will last and will help when we have issues to discuss, that people respect each other and work out diferences with ease and maybe a laugh as well.
The prize...well it doesn't go vroom vroom, you can't wear it and it doesn't sparkle...and I do know what the prize is, but only Chrys can tell everybody...as she is the Dictator, oops, sorry, the Leader here!
Thanks for being a part of the workshops...it's the participants involement which makes them work and brings us all together.
All personal attacks and in-house fighting will resume to nomal levels after the workshop!!...LMFAO
Maybe a workshop on the perfect insults and how to deliver them with maximum effect could be done...I'm joking!!!!
HS
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With all that I am and all that I could be, I walk this earth, yet nobody sees me.
Hooded Stranger
Sat, 2011-07-02 06:42
Anna
Anna,
yes there is a real prize!
you lost it!...I didn't say you hadn't!! LMFAO
HS
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With all that I am and all that I could be, I walk this earth, yet nobody sees me.
Hooded Stranger
Sat, 2011-07-02 11:40
Anna
double posting!!
HS
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Workshops are now open:
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With all that I am and all that I could be, I walk this earth, yet nobody sees me.