The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:

The poem "Paradox!" presents a thoughtful exploration of existential questions, using a first-person narrative to delve into the themes of self-discovery, spirituality, and solitude.

The use of rhetorical questions throughout the poem effectively conveys the speaker's confusion and longing for answers. This technique could be further enhanced by varying the structure of these questions to avoid repetition and maintain the reader's interest.

The poem's language is generally clear and accessible, which is effective in communicating complex philosophical ideas. However, the use of clichéd phrases such as "ascends to heaven" and "God's own family" detracts from the poem's originality. Experimenting with more unique metaphors or imagery could enhance the poem's expressiveness and impact.

The poem's structure could benefit from more consistency. The irregular rhyme scheme and varying line lengths create a somewhat disjointed reading experience. Establishing a more consistent rhythm could improve the poem's flow and readability.

The final line, "a paradox indeed!" effectively encapsulates the poem's theme and leaves the reader with a strong impression. However, the term "paradox" could be introduced earlier in the poem to strengthen this conclusion and create a more cohesive narrative.

Overall, the poem shows promise in its exploration of complex themes and its use of a personal narrative voice. With some refinement of language, structure, and thematic development, it could become a more compelling piece.

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Excellent poem...but what touched me the most is the section (Last Few Words) where you wrote about forgiveness. I want to forgive my mother for all of the things she perpetrated against me. But I am in turmoil, I just cannot find it in me to forgive her... maybe I would feel better if I did forgive her. I really want to let go of the pain! I am ME because of all that has happened to me because of her. She made my strong, the hating of her was what kept me sane and made me strong enough to survive. Your poem brings all of this to the front.

p.s.
when she was dying, she begged my forgiveness. and I gave it to her, to ease her passing, but I lied! Now I need to forgive myself...

This is a very good piece that makes a person wonder;
what is the purpose of all this?
Your title is good, the language use equally so.

Your beginning is good with the asking of a question
and discription of the problem. How does one know?

My only criticism, is that you missed the natural addition of [of] in the line:
"And in the wake [of] disbelief."

The ending is a continuation of the question in the beginning, and
makes the whole thing come together. Nice job! ~ Geez.
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