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BLACKBERRY WINTER

I see blackberry winter's here
that very special time of year
when thorny vine's small white bloom
announces colder weather's doom

It's cold enough to wear long sleeves
to ward off spring's last chilly breeze
yet warm enough up in the day
to show that cold won't long hold sway

The flower of this lowly berry
reminds that summer will not tarry
this mini-season won't last long
so don a cloak and come along

We'll enjoy this evening's nip
hands in each others loving grip
and gaze into each others eyes
as stars replace the crisp blue skies

As whippoorwill gives serenade
from 'cross the pond in brushy glade
beneath a blanket we'll start to plan
vacationing on the ocean's sand

But in the back of cozy mind
all thoughts of winter left behind
tiny voices, soft and sweet
whisper : next comes summer's stifling heat

another one transferred from old site

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I love the AABB through the poem
To me this is the best I've read of you.
the whole picture is beautiful, The words you weaved here are a tepestry of delight.
Truly enjoyed the music you created for the reader
Bravo!
My two Fav. Stanza's;
"The flower of this lowly berry
reminds that summer won't long tarry < the use of this word is wonderful
this mini-season won't last long
so don a cloak and come along"
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"As whippoorwill gives serenade
from 'cross the pond in brushy glade< loved this line, what imagery
beneath a blanket we'll start to plan
vacationing on the ocean's sand"
Eddie C.

LIFE ISN'T ABOUT WAITING FOR THE STORM TO PASS
IT'S ABOUT LEARNING HOW TO DANCE IN THE RAIN.
VIVIAN GREENE

So glad you enjoyed this "oldie"................stan

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Saw the black berrys start to bloom today and thought this would be a good time to bring this back from old site. Glad you liked it..................stan

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Carolina's Robert Frost ??........well now there's no pressure at all lol. Always good to hear from a near neighbor...........stan

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