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SINS of the FLESH
I so love your skin's feel
beneath my old rough fingers
e'en after a caress I steal
the memory still lingers
As touch moves on to gentle cleft
I'm filled with anticipation
of patience I am now bereft
please fill my expectation
And as each little roundish nub
also begs for attention
calling out for a light rub
and a poem's lyric mention
Just the sight of your soft curves
fills me with such delight
and never ever fails to serve
to enrich my appetite
The taste of you upon my lips
is beyond most others' reaches
and now my secret finally slips
I sure love eating peaches
Another oldie from old site...........scribbler
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Structured: Western
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scribbler
Mon, 2011-02-21 20:38
sins
thanks for coming by and leaving an optional version. i am always editing my stuff and will keep your ideas in mind when I edit this................scribbler
author commentscribbler
Mon, 2011-02-21 20:40
sins
the only cereal I kill is a bowl of corn flakes lol.I'm glad you liked this.............stan
author commentKailashana2
Mon, 2011-02-21 16:07
You'll go to hell for this!
You'll go to hell for this!
;-)
~A
scribbler
Mon, 2011-02-21 20:42
What ????
For writing about fruit? lmao...........................stan
author commentloved
Mon, 2011-02-21 21:47
i steal many a heart
you many a soul
and keep most of us guessing
what's coming up next?
loved
scribbler
Tue, 2011-02-22 13:18
hi
Beware scribbler Stealer of souls lol. thanks for coming by................scribbler
author commentloved
Tue, 2011-02-22 16:09
Hi
once in a way
i come by
at other times
I'm shy
loved
scribbler
Tue, 2011-02-22 13:21
hello Jayne
I'm going to post some stuff from old site on occasion, so you'll see familiar writes once in a while. Think I will delete comma...........stan
author commentraj
Tue, 2011-02-22 13:32
Dear Stan
for me this was a virgin read and having read this one..i can safely say that this one is from a thorough bred romantic ....cleverly written...titillating the mind without being gross....
raj (sublime_ocean)
scribbler
Tue, 2011-02-22 18:50
sins
There is a lot of difference between erotic and pornographic. I'm glad you like this..................stan
author commentlou
Tue, 2011-02-22 14:24
Fruity
another peach
lou
Stand tall, be proud to be who you are, give the world the finger!!!!
scribbler
Tue, 2011-02-22 18:51
hello lou
thank you.............stan
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