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They don't give a flying fuck

Innocence ripped to shreds, 
belittled, left bleeding
Fucked over left for dead,
Pat the perpetrator on the back
Make them feel welcome 

Pluck hearts out
twist and burn.
Give them a tv and games console,
Make them feel cosy,

Government rewards the aggressor
protects his human rights.
Whilst the victim becomes the villain,
And goes through Hell.

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Last few words: 
A comment on the law and the prison service in the UK
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lou ...this could also apply to the
law system here in australia

and perhaps elsewhere?

with that thought in mind, your title, and
first line, could possibly read,
"They don't give a flying fuck"
(not necessarily a suggestion ...just a thought)

cosey ~ cosy

reading this, i felt
a great level of anger /frustration?

harnessed so well in the main

a couple of areas i would tweak structure
for a tighter picture ...but that's
just me

cheers
p

Thank you, I will take account of your comments.

Lou

Stand tall, be proud to be who you are, give the world the finger!!!!

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Whoops saved twice.

Lou

Stand tall, be proud to be who you are, give the world the finger!!!!

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it will do you good to let your anger out lol

thank you shirl

love lou

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the situation makes me angry.lol

thanks Bee

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lou,

it would be a good balance to also write from the individual who despite their actions, need the Human Rights act to help them.

A good example is the right for a convicted criminal who is in jail, to be able to vote during an Government election. Just because they are incarsarated doesn't mean they stop having an opinion, especially if the new government voted in makes changes to the way prisons are run which directly affect the individuals who had 'previously' no right to vote.

I am not siding with either side, just a poem from the other perspective would be an interesting challenge.

regards,

HS

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With all that I am and all that I could be, I walk this earth, yet nobody sees me.

That would be an interesting angle to ,cover, personally I think you lose your right to effect the country and it's laws , when you brake the law and lose your freedom.

Lou

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Thanks for reading .

Love lou

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Innocence is misspelled, Lou.

But I ask you: did you have a choice to be who you are and by definition who you are not?

Did you begin your life with any given promises that held your life in perfect balance, in check?
No, none of us are fortunate enough. We are products of our genes, our society, our nature and nurture, and most importantly, the world that lives in our minds.

When you find that balance in you, Lou...you will have arrived at that place where you see yourself *again for the first time* and you will have been the poet you are destined to be.

~A

Now this ... is a most beautiful statement. How very very true. Thank you for posting this. ~Pamela

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Lou

Stand tall, be proud to be who you are, give the world the finger!!!!

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Thanks, im all for human rights, but not to the point where murders and thieves, appear to have more rights than people who don't break the law.

lou

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I don't think we're talking about *rights* here, Lou, we're talking about living embellishments.
And certainly it is true that the imprisoned have hospitalization, dental, 3 squares, exercise equipment tv, books and programs. Not so the homeless, especially with the recent downturn of global living standards in *affluent* countries. Some folks don't even have cars to sleep in.

However much I agree with the disparity between innocent and guilty, how society treats their elderly, children, citizens and prisoners speaks of them. So far it seems that prisoners have a higher standard of life than many of the disenfranchised.

Lastly a prison full of men rioting is not a good thing. It's happened before, they *exercise* more clout than the common folk.

~A

I know what I'm saying . I don't think that prisoners should be breaking rocks, equally, they shouldnt be treated as if they have more rights than the victim or be given DVDs and X box games . My sister is a prison officer, so I know how they treat them, my sister has to call the prisoner mr. when speaking to them.
and has to be so careful.

I don't think prisoners should be abused but shouldnt be pandered to, they are there to punished and rehabilitate.

Lou

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I love this, It speaks loud and clear, and I have no criticism.

You are quite right, in western countries in general convicted criminals serving time are provided for in ways that honest citizens are not entitled to. But I think that this is only right, given that government, through law enforcement and the judicial system, takes responsibility for their well-being - their human rights - when it convicts and incarcerates them. I myself would prefer that a murderer or rapist be provided for within the confines of a prison, than have them outside, roaming the streets, looking for another victim.

Someone said convicted criminals doing time should be able to vote. I say, only after they get out of prison, since the whole idea of prison is to take away the convicted person's civil rights - in other words, their freedom to participate.

And I do agree, that things such as game consoles and other luxuries should be denied convicts, or at least only allocated for use as a special priveledge.

An excellent poem, Lou. I always enjoy it when a good piece of writing elicits such responses!
Thanks.

Respectfully, Race

"Laws and Rules don't kill freedom: narrow-minded intolerance does" - Race-9togo

http://www.lulu.com/spotlight/Race_9togo

Thank you.

I'm not saying the government shouldn't feed and clothe prisoners, just not pamper them.

Glad that you enjoyed the poem.

Lou

Stand tall, be proud to be who you are, give the world the finger!!!!

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I agree with Jim on this one.

Government rewards the aggressor
protects his human rights.
Whilst the victim becomes the villain,
And goes through Hell.

Well stated!!!

love, Cat

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When someone reads your work
And responds, please be courteous
And reply in kind, thanks.

The way that crooks are rewarded makes me so angry.

thanks.

love lou

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An emotional commentary on a tough situation.
They - the invincible "they". And always its the little guy who pays dearly.

You have certainly conveyed anger and disgust in this piece.

~Pamela

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Thank you very much for reading my poem.

Love lou

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