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I Regret I Fear and Regret Revisited

Submitted by lou on Sat, 2011-02-05 04:57

I Regret I Fear - part one

I regret, I fear, that you were ever here
Love so intense, I feel too much to my chagrin
not better to be in love and lose
better to have that love at any cost

languishing in desolation
wish I could keep you at arms length
you envelop my heart

supine in my grief I repent at the alter of my emotions
wracked with regret I’ve let this wound fester
repair the chasm, let the lesion coagulate

irrevocably in love , still resolute
at the risk of plagiarising Piaf
no I do not regret
I fear I do not regret

Regret Revisited - part two

Regret , I fear, has turned into acceptence
Love so intense, now glad you were here.
Wish with all my heart, I hadn’t lost you.

I Bask in sweet memories of the past
Still long to be with you.
But I’ve come to the conclusion,
I’ll never have you.

Sometimes the pain feels like it has gone,
But love lingers on.
irrevocably in love , still resolute

Fuck I’m not over you.

Review Request (Intensity):

I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing stage:

Editing - rough draft

Comments

lou

Sat, 2011-02-05 07:53

Ian

Thanks

lou

Stand tall, be proud to be who you are, give the world the finger!!!!

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Kailashana2

Sat, 2011-02-05 08:32

Another poem worthy of

Another poem worthy of critique, but I'm afraid I have none.

lou

Sat, 2011-02-05 10:02

anna

thanks

lou

Stand tall, be proud to be who you are, give the world the finger!!!!

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themoonman

Sat, 2011-02-05 10:41

Hi Lou ...

Remove some of the pronouns and I think
it would improve this greatly.
"you will always be the one" ... unneeded and trite
just one man's opinions.

thanks for posting

lou

Sun, 2011-02-06 00:35

Richard

I take your point

Lou

Stand tall, be proud to be who you are, give the world the finger!!!!

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Nordic cloud

Mon, 2011-02-07 01:46

A sad little story that many experience
at least once in their lives,
and which linger on a long time
if many of the circumstances fitted
while it lasted;
you put it plain and simple here Lou,
and we are drawn to sympathise with it.

Love Ann.

"The image of yourself which you see in a mirror Is dead,
but the reflection of the moon on water, lives." Kenzan.

lou

Wed, 2011-02-09 16:20