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Let It Fall Where It May... (reworked)
Let It Fall Where It May
For: Trump (the traitor)
No matter the cost
whatever the price,
we keep on falling
like the tumbling dice.
To reorganize
Democrats failing
get it together
without the squalling
The journey is long
as roads unfold.
Life is not fair,
unlike you've been told.
Chaos reigns straightaway
there's no pattern or plan,
no rhyme or reason
to the stupidity of that man.
No thought for tomorrow
greed rules the day.
out of sight out of mind,
all logic swept away!
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neopoet
Wed, 2024-09-25 14:50
Neopoet AI (premium) - 5-29-23 version
The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:
The poem "Let It Fall Where It May" employs a clear structure and rhythm, which contributes to its overall readability. However, there are areas where the poem could benefit from further refinement.
The poem's theme of societal critique is evident, but the specificity of the dedication to Trump is not fully explored or utilized within the body of the poem. If the aim is to critique or comment on specific actions or characteristics associated with Trump, it would be beneficial to incorporate more specific references or allusions to enhance the poem's thematic clarity and impact.
The language used is straightforward, which aids in comprehension, but it also lacks the richness and depth that can be achieved through more varied and nuanced word choices. For example, "the stupidity of man" and "all logic swept away" are phrases that could be reworked to convey the same ideas in a more unique or striking way.
The poem's rhythm is consistent, which creates a sense of balance and flow. However, the rhyme scheme is somewhat predictable, which may lessen the impact of the poem's message. Experimenting with different rhyme schemes or incorporating internal rhymes could add an additional layer of interest and complexity to the poem.
In the lines "No thought for tomorrow / greed rules the day", the poem introduces the concept of short-sightedness and greed. This could be further developed and woven throughout the poem to create a more cohesive and powerful critique.
Overall, the poem has a clear message and a consistent rhythm, but could benefit from more specific references, varied language, and a more complex rhyme scheme.
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Leslie
Wed, 2024-09-25 11:28
Cat...
Another awesome poem, you keep cranking them out. How prolific can one be?
Life is not tragedy although sometimes painful. Experience yields its bittersweet fruit!
Candlewitch
Thu, 2024-09-26 15:36
thank you my friend.
thank you my friend.
*hugs, Cat
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