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Salmon pink chewed gum stuck to pvc floors
stuck to timeworn seats and graphite sprayed,
sprayed by an undeveloped child. But unlike

that pallid gum he was free. And just like that
spritz it will be washed away a new memory
a freedom moving forward and not backwards.

The water vapour and finger print hazey windows
and an odour of diesel a hiss of a deadly rattle snake
and a screech caused by slipping wheels is a sound of
travel and wonder

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Was so vivid,
It had me giggling.

You have such a talent with descriptions


It Meens alot !

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i love your imagery this is wonderful


I appreciate your comment

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