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"The Wild Hunt"

prepare a bath of soft water
swirl in oil of rosewood
with petals of hyacinth and lavender
that I may ready myself
for my lover on Beltane...

under the pale orb in mid sky
the horns sound, questing and low
with his wolves tracking the scent
the Beltane beast will not get far
for they shall run it to ground.

a cup of spiced clover honey meade
to wet my lips and warm my blood
to make us both sing high notes.
somewhere in the night my lover
rides in quest of "the wild hunt"

waiting, my thoughts racing
not quite the cusp of midnight
after moonrise, he senses me...
drawing close to where I wait
in my garden of wild flowers.

what is this spell come over me
gliding step, I move as if in a dream
carried on a Beltane breeze, I float.
tinkling of wind chimes, tender songs
against the wolfen howls!

a swirling mist surrounds us as
pulling me close, curvy back to him;
hands caressing his hips
with painted long finger tips
my words, a shivering sigh:

"take this body of mortal flesh
give me your kiss of eternal death..."

bathe us both in hot blood while
making promises we cannot keep
but give us eyes to see anew
the vanishing sights of the wild hunt
in the dying of the pale moon's soft glow...

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*Beltane is a wiccan/pagan holiday
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*always, Cat/Candlewitch

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look at a place that only exists for one night. This is a great story that either starts or ends here. I read lots of Sci-fi and Fantasy, and this is as good as anything I've read ever. Nicely done. ~ Geez.
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your reaction to my poem is a treasure to me, and I love you for all you are. I know that you mean what you say. again, thank you.

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This is beautiful..fantasy mixed with facts! It is descriptive, sensual and magical all wrapped into one. Great job.

~RoseBlack~

of all the poets on Neo... yours and Gee's opinion and advice mean the most to me. two mighty fine poets and friends.

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That means a lot. I value yours and Gees opinion as always.

~RoseBlack~

This is absolutely spectacular I agree with Gee. It's brilliant.

a swirling mist surrounds us as
pulling me close, curvy back to him;
hands caressing his hips
with painted long finger tips
my words, a shivering sigh:

"take this body of mortal flesh
give me your kiss of eternal death..."

bathe us both in hot blood while
making promises we cannot keep
but give us eyes to see anew
the vanishing sights of the wild hunt
in the dying of the pale moon's soft glow...

Those last few stanzas are some of the best I've read in a while.

Much love always Lilbit xxx

“The world is full of magic things, patiently waiting for our senses to grow sharper.” — W.B. Yeats

thank you for your uplifting support which has bolstered me since the beginning. I am so very glad that you enjoyed my poem; the wild hunt! I hope you are well. my thoughts are with you.

* love, Cat Sis

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S2, L2 try changing sounding to sound.You might want to repost this come Halloween lol

thanks for the help, I always appreciate it :) you are right that sounds much better. Beltane is a Spring happening, also known as "May Day". thanks for the thoughts.

*love, Cat

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I love the words you used, ethereal, evocotive and emotional, so atmospheric:

"take this body of mortal flesh
give me your kiss of eternal death..."

"May the blessings of Beltane be with you throughout the year, and may you always be guided by the wisdom and love of the ancient ones who came before us. May the fires of Beltane light your path and warm your heart, as you welcome the bright and beautiful season of summer."

So apt for the changing of the seasons. Ruby :)

Give and grow - let's raise our verses together. I'm happy to comment on your work and appreciate a comment on mine.

thank you for your kind and welcome wishes! I remember the fires of Beltane, and the spirit of the night... I don't get out much anymore, but celebrate in my heart and my thoughts are primitively joyful as I sip from a wine glass. it is nice to read a response from someone who understands the basis of my poem. I wish the same good things for you!

*love, hugs and Brightest of Blessings, Cat

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You're welcome and your poem is beautifully penned. As I've said elsewhere, it is a joy to be here, learning and growing. May the blessings of Beltane be upon each and every one of us xxx Ruby :)

Give and grow - let's raise our verses together. I'm happy to comment on your work and appreciate a comment on mine.

I’ve had a rough and busy month and I’m sorry I’ve been missing all my friends.

I’m in love with every word of this. Of course we stole it and called it “May Day”. Total rubbish. This modern world knows nothing but deicide by assimilation of old ideas. It’s no mistake we found each other bound to earth and tethered to the old.

I wrote a poem for you awhile back entitled “Hitchhiking in the Dark”

https://www.neopoet.com/workshop/poems/hitchhiking-dark-candlewitch

I am pleased to tell you it is going to be published by Local Gems Press ‘Rhode Island Bards 2023 Anthology”. I’d like to send you a copy of the book when it is pressed in July. I’ll be doing a live reading of the poem as well at their event.

I hope you and Steven are doing well. Also, I never did mail the painting of your GTO. I’ll get on that for you. I’ve been seeking better employment and I had my choice of four jobs. I start my new position next Monday so I’m both nervous and excited.

Shoot me a message if you get a chance
Tim

all of your news is incredible! congratulations on the new job. I hope it keeps your creative juices flowing and keeps you inspired! as for my poem, thanks for what you have gleamed from it. I want to read your poem, cannot hardly wait!!! thank you so much! Steve says "hello" too!

*much love, Cat

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I had to return this poem its delicious.

I was here, again.

love you always Lilbit xxx

“The world is full of magic things, patiently waiting for our senses to grow sharper.” — W.B. Yeats

your love does not go unnoticed. much love to you, Sis Cat

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